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A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 3:40 am
by twilsbach
random musing on a Monday morningHow many of you have written lyrics that start with..."Well I...."Its used as almost a rhythmic kick start. My simple challenge is--don't do that anymore. Find a new way.
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 3:55 am
by linziellen
So I...! You're very right, I often think the same about my lyrics. So/Well/And/But! Have you found a new way?Lindsey.
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 6:56 am
by hummingbird
Quote:random musing on a Monday morningHow many of you have written lyrics that start with..."Well I...."Its used as almost a rhythmic kick start. My simple challenge is--don't do that anymore. Find a new way. well, I sometimes start a lyric like that, then I take out those words. so this would become'start a lyric like that'
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:15 am
by twilsbach
Quote:So I...! You're very right, I often think the same about my lyrics. So/Well/And/But! Have you found a new way?Lindsey.I haven't, but since I've posted this this morning, I've even thought further about it....How many of my lyrics start with "I". My latest endeavor's first line is "I hear my echo".My last CD opening lines...1-Your mind wasn't made for reading2-I hate the rain, I hate the grey3-You fall into me...4-When theres nothing wrong...5-She don't come around anymore....6-One mistake leads to another...7-She goes down to Mardi Gras...8-And You would look at me and smile....9-You said everybody's changing...10-Did you lose the thing you thought was pure...11-Tonight the lines don't connect....Just things i'm thinking about lately.
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 3:51 pm
by carlosgomez
I wrote one that started with "Well They" but I am pretty sure it was the only song.Well I should go. hehe
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 2:20 am
by jamesrjones
I know exactly what you mean. I seem to run into that problem further into verses though. "Well", "but", and "and" are good joining words, at least for me. My current song lyric starts out..."I'm feeling uninspired"Jim
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 5:21 am
by edteja
A lonely pronoun led off a golden songBut I chopped it off to make the lyric strongWell I don't do this enough it seemsAnd that's why the screeners always scream.
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 5:38 am
by arkjack
Its a Highwayman thing.... if you listen to a lot of Willie, Waylon, Kris, and Johnny.... probably the most classic one that comes to mind for me.....Well I....... rolled outa Pittsburgh rolling' down the eastern seaboard.....Got my........ diesel wound up running like never beforeThere's a...... speed zone ahead on the rightAnd I don't..... see a cop in sight..ArkJack
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 6:47 am
by twilsbach
Quote:A lonely pronoun led off a golden songBut I chopped it off to make the lyric strongWell I don't do this enough it seemsAnd that's why the screeners always scream.
Re: A simple lyrical challenge....
Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 8:16 am
by Mark Kaufman
Sometimes the attitude behind "Well I" is just the ticket. But it's usually just laziness.You're right about it being a "rhythmic kick start"... Voice as percussion instrument...sometimes it doesn't work as well when you substitute, say, a name with the same rhythm."Well I walked on down the line...""Larry walked on down the line..."