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Don't Want Ya
Posted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:22 pm
by kmontgomery
This is one of many of my songs. First one I have ever posted. Would love feedback. Just a demo of me and my piano. Not the whole song because it is to big to post.
Re: Don't Want Ya
Posted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:27 pm
by ottlukk
kmontgomery: I got an error message saying it wouldn't download.Ott
Re: Don't Want Ya
Posted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:32 pm
by kmontgomery
I did at first. Check your pop up blocker. That is what was wrong with mine. Thanks for trying:)
Re: Don't Want Ya
Posted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 6:22 pm
by hookjawbrown
Love your vocal range and soulfullness. Nice idea for a song, bit of truth there. Your piano fills don't work though. Find an accompanist and let your vocals do the work.
Re: Don't Want Ya
Posted: Thu Sep 10, 2009 9:16 am
by northernwriter
I liked the idea and like your voice. I would like to hear a full work up of the song.
Re: Don't Want Ya
Posted: Thu Sep 10, 2009 1:52 pm
by ottlukk
I turned off my pop up blocker, and still got an error message.Ott
Re: Don't Want Ya
Posted: Sun Sep 13, 2009 4:25 pm
by keysmandld
Nice song and good structure. Like the hook "I don't want ya, don't want to have you..." Not sure the next line really works for me. Seem a bit awkward rhythmically and a little too predictable Would like to see a little more clever development. Mabe make use of the word "have" again in the sense of not wanting another woman to have him in the next line. Just my 2 cents. I like the rest of what you have done. Just think it needs a little work here.Best wishes,Dave