The Letter.. Genre/Listing help..Inst. Version

[geo]

Hi Guys...I have an issue with genre here... is it kinda "Down Tempo" or something... or just AAA? So have a quick listen an tell me what you think... of course any and all comments welcomed... especially mix pointers...Oh... Broadcast quality ... and should I edit it down to a sax instrumental?Peace, Geohttp://www.taximusic.com/download/119311....ct ... strumental versionhttp://www.taximusic.com/download/206319/The%2 ... st_.mp3The Letter (Our Perfect Place)Lyrics and music by George Danielscopyright 2007Verse 1:Dear sweetheart,Time to write the letter today,I’ll be leaving it with the Chaplain,There’s so much to say.Please, don’t you worry, don’t you cry,I told you God loves The Corp he’ll never let me die. But as you read this, wipe the tears from your face,And hold on tight to our perfect place,That perfect place. Verse 2:Oh and sweetheart,Please give your Mom my love,And tell your Old Man I said thank you,For treating me like a son.I know we always planned to start a life of our own,And have a perfect place, we could call our home,Now I’m gone, I can’t tell you honey what you should do,But please know that I’ll always be waiting for you,In our perfect place.Break:Got long lines for the chow, long days on patrol,Long nights on sentry, long time no furlough.Long moments of terror, long moments of boredom,A long time in country and brother, I’m ready for home. Verse 3:Nights are long, dark and cold,The days blazing hot, they tear at my soul, Sweetheart I wrote you this letter, just in case,I can’t make it back to our perfect place.So please, don’t you worry, don’t you cry,I told you God loves The Corp he’ll never let me die. But as you read this, wipe the tears from your face,And hold on tight to our perfect place,That perfect place.

[billg]

Geo, sound quality sounds fine to me. If I were you I'd edit this down for a sax instrumental, I think you'll have a lot better chance of a placement & some $$.

[geo]

Thanks Bill....I had that idea while it was posting... the guy's name is Mitch Kaplan... his Dad was a well known RI Sax player and he's a chip off the old block.... unfortunately I've used up my freebies but do have 5 or 6 tunes I could try this with ...Always appreciated ...Peace, Geo

[southpaw]

Geo, dont have a lot of time right now to give you an in depth review right now, heres a couple thoughts i had:You got me on the genre... I love the blend personally! I heard a little bit of 'Everlast' in there at times.. I was listening to it, and i immediately thought film/tv song. Sax is solid. You could probly edit to a sax instrumental, as well as pitch what you got now to a couple listings. In terms of mix, low end is all over the place. Primarily the bass, it really interrupted my listening experience. The acoustic guitar is too dark. The bottom of the AG and BG freqs seem to overlap to create a 'muddy' pulsing sound. The kick sounds round and punchy, vocals and everything else sound fine man, But the bass and AG distract, i think if you adress the low end you'll be at broadcast quality or close enough imo. Some qucik ideas for dealing with these elements i mentioned are:First drop the bass level a few dbs. Maybe cut some at around 100-120hz and 700hz from the bass, (Narrow Q) try rolling off under 60hzish or whatever sounds right.. Maybe a little snap at 2.5 would sound cool for this track.Try and make the AG brighter, this takes a little more time to get right, might try to give a little presence between 2-5k but not to overlap with the vocal clarity. For the intro i dont like the AG personally, id like to hear keys, maybe organ with some edgy attack tone-wise if you know what i mean. These are just a couple ideas, im not listening through monitors so im somewhat guestimating and giving you general octaves here.All in all, i definitely enjoyed the vibe and im still listening to it now. Clean up the low end of the mix, maybe play with intro a little, and i think you got a cool and versatile song here. Hth. Let us know when you get an update posted, id like to hear this one again with a few tweaks. Cheers,Jamie

[geo]

Thanks Jamie!!!I just read your post (and printed) for tomorrows mixing session... will repost....I threw together an instrumental version.... Peace, Geo

[kitz]

I'm hearing the doors. Southpaw has some great ideas to try. Sorry I can't be anymore suggestive but I'm beat and wouldn't be much help right now...Kitz