"Dreams Are Made"

[jwebbinspired]

Hello all. This is a song I wrote early last year. I feel it has a lot of promise, but I wanted some opinions. I sent it to a publisher last year. He said he liked it but didn't have a placement for it. yada yada I feel it might need a bridge in there to give it a lift of some kind. If you guys think it is good, I will probably have a professional demo made. Please give me any feedback. If there any places I should improve please, please let me know. I know my production is bad. As always.New version: http://www.taximusic.com/stream/199771/ ... p3Original http://www.taximusic.com/stream/199323/ ... mp3"Dreams Are Made"©2008 Andrew S. WillsShe always dreams of being a doctor,To help sick little kids,So she worked her way through college,Choosing books over her friends,And on her graduation day,Her Dad asked "How does it feel?"She said, "This life never felt better,""Since I took the wheel"And everytime, Someone says I'm lucky,I say, dreams don't come true,Dreams are made,He dreamed of writing songs,For singer from Tennesse,So he pulled out his old guitar,Started in the key of GHe searched down in his soul,Where the words run free,He said "I don't set goals""No, I write history"

[jwebbinspired]

Thank's for the input eRich. I'll play around with it. I'm going to have to step back. It's been this way for so long it's going to be hard to visualize. I'm sure I can do it, it's just not going to be as easy as usual

[questor]

jweb,Overall nice solid tune, really nice grove in the music, nice buildup for the choruses, nicely done.As for me, the issues I think are:1. The words Every-time, are a little awkward sounding, but you do a very good job with a tough split.2. I heard a slightly different melody in that a few lines would end in a slightly higher/lower note on the rhymes to accentuate the melody. But really hard to describe in detail with words, but you get the idea hopefully. Very close to what you have melodically, but perhaps a bit more 'flair' on the vocals as your voice is clearly capable of nice flair and accentuations.3. 'Dreams are made' does work. But I almost feel like that the line does not deliver the emotional crescendo that the rest of the song makes me assume I will feel. (How is that for an introspective thought! ) Alternates are a tough call, which is why 'Dreams are made' is a solid second choice, but it is worth looking into a getting more umph from that delivery line if you can.Of course, that is just my opinion.Overall, very nice story and solid vocals/instrumentation. Good job!Regards,Q

[jwebbinspired]

Q, I really appreciate your opinion. Thank you for explaining all that to me. It's very helpful. And I definitely understand now what you're saying. Did you hear the "new" version of this song, it's somewhere in the middle of the post?... I just want to make sure you are talking from my new version, so I don't get confused....that happens easily.

[jwebbinspired]

No problem man, I was fully believing that my new one needed work

[jwebbinspired]

Cam, Are you saying that the stories in commerical country music have to be told the same way? I'm not challenging you, I'm just asking because I don't feel like I know nearly as much about the market compared to many of you. I wrote this song diliberately open ended....because it's about my wife and I, and I don't exactly have a "number one" song yet Do you think adding a third verse uniting the first two verse is needed? Would that be considered an "end?" And if I did, how in the world would I unite those two verse? LOL And make it point back to the hook? My brain hurts. Is your impression that all commerical country has to be the same exact format? Andy

[questor]

Quote:<SNIP>I don't get the "Since I took the wheel" line. I guess you mean since either she got her driver's license or her dad bought her a car for graduation, but I'm not sure which and what it has to do with the rest of the song. I'm also wondering why you put it in quotes.<SNIP>Just wanted to say that I took the meaning of the line "Since I took the wheel" to be more general meaning that the person took control of their life... (although double meaning is implied to me since it is in quotes).Personally I like lyrics that are not always completely literal (ie: has multiple or abstract meaning), but then again I am no expert on country music either.In fairness though, it is true that most abstract writing is done by original authors, which is less the case with country music...especially that submitted for Taxi. So it is a valid point to bring up... though I think this falls into the multi-meaning category, and is therefore not overtly abstract.(okay, I re-read that last paragraph and it makes sense... I think!! )Regards,Q.

[jwebbinspired]

So I should get rid of the quotes sounds like? I am going to have to rework the chorus I guess. So it's more fitting for country. I like lyrics that are not completely literal too, but would love to make some money with my obsession too. Thanks Q-Andy