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New song I wrote. New to lyrics but I need to start somewhere.Theme is about winning in sports. Don't know if it could apply to winning in life, but let me know what you think.Song Link: http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... ics:VERSE1 We're focused, with hands steady We’ll make it happen cause we are ready Come so far, feeling like a super star VERSE 2 Have the spirit and dedication We're gona travel all across the nation We are having fun out beneath the roaring sun CHORUS We're stepping into the zone we're reaching for the stars get your game on. (whooo) get your game on (whooo) Were gona be at the top We're ready and were able get your game on (whooo) get your game on (whoooo) VERSE 3 We worked hard to get here we've been here before, there's nothing to fear together as one pushing for another home run CHORUS We're stepping into the zone we're reaching for the stars get your game on. (whooo) get your game on (whooo) BRIDGE When you win there's no need to hide That feeling you get inside Makes you wana shout out loud And join with your roaring crowd CHORUS We're stepping into the zone we're reaching for the stars get your game on. (whooo) get your game on (whooo)Thanks,Matt

Hey MattInteresting song. I think it has a lot of potential but has a ways to go before it's really there. While I like the music, and the lyrics, even the melodies... I just don't think it has a cohesive sound that takes it to the next level. There are a couple of key things I think you should focus on... genre and tone. If you're going for the sports thing, then it has to be in your face and aggressive for the most part IMO. While you kind of have that going with the guitars, the vocal is completely in the opposite direction with a very mellow, folky lilt to it... which was really unexpected for me, and felt kind of like James Taylor trying to sing with Green Day. Commit to one mood, and go for it.On the production end, I think you're getting there, but again... if you focus on genre and tone I think you'll get a better sense of where you want to go with it and be able to really go in one direction. The guitars need some boosting for a more aggressive feel, and the drums would probably need some reworking in general to give it more forward propulsion.I hope that helps, and best of luck with the piece!

Thanks Zoom,I think you are right about the voice (which is mine) being wrong for the song. I think it could be used for another singer though to get the idea though. No mastering has been done to the track yet and that may bring out more in the guitars and such.I think if I add power like you say to the guitars and maybe even give it more a punk rock feel it may be ok for sports pitches.I think I need to raise the key as well. Thanks again for you in-depth reply Zoom.Matt