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Hello all:) I posted a question about how many critiques should someone get before rewriting/re-demoing an already Pro Demo. Many suggested posting the song here to get a consensus before spending the money to re-demo a song.So here is my first post. I will post the screener's thoughts and critiques after I have several of your thoughts on the song.I appreciate the listen:)This is a female Country/Pop (Uptempo)http://www.myspace.com/danasongsWho Do You Think You AreI could be ShaniaOr George JonesI could even be CherTurn up the volume on my ipodLet the music take me there…My life can get crazy [so crazy]I could use some time awayI know a solution to the problemI just need to press playChorusWho do you think you areWhen you hear that songAre you Elvis singing Hound-DogWhen the Radio plays the sounds that makeYou feel like you’re a SuperstarWho do you think you areWhen you hear that beat of the drumsTo Dancing in the StreetsLife can use a break for goodness sakeMaybe we were born to play the partSo who do you think you are [Who do you think you are]I could be DollyOr Reba I could be Elton JohnTurn up the volume on the JukeboxAnd start singing alongMy life can get crazy [so crazy]Need a change of atmosphereI just grab some headphonesTurn the power onLet my worries disappear Chorus repeats 2x’sDana L. Matthews March 15th 2007 © All Rights Reserved

Hi Dana,The idea/concept is excellent. I listen to a pretty good deal of Country music and you are on to something with this one. These are my comments:1. The melodies are solid and I think almost there. 2. The lyrics are good (great in places) but not quite as strong as they could be and you have some prosody issues.3. The title of the song is weak and implies a negative meaning like "I can't believe you insulted me. Who do you think you are?"4. The song seems to beg for a lift/pre-chorus right at the end of the first stanza in the verses. You can probably adapt your lyric to a melody that lifts the second stanza right into that first line of the chorus melody.I really like your idea and I realize you've spent some serious cash on this pro demo, but I think it would be well worth the re-write as you have something here that's in high demand - a feel good uptempo Country song. Those are the hardest to write.This is something I learned on one of my demos. I was in the same position - a really good and possibly great tune that I spent a good deal of money and favors on and in the end it wasn't quite there. Now my philosophy is to do a very basic demo and work the song til I get right. It saves on the heartache and the pocketbook.Best of luck,Cisco

Dana,i agree with Cisco --- the idea/concept is really something special, but overall the lyric doesn't live up to it yet. Some magic in places. Don't have time right now for much detail, but the 2nd verse doesn't take us anywhere new. Personally I think the title is pretty strong, but I'm not an expert in this genre (but I did stay at a Holiday Inn Express once).Aub

It sounds like something I'd hear on CMT. Country isn't really my genre but I think this is really well done. I think this could maybe even get forwarded to the right "high-bar" listing. Good luck.

Hi guys, really appreciating the feedback! I want to get this right because I think its worth it.So if can get some more specific details that will point me in the direction of what some may think is wrong or weak about the lyric with suggestions on a direction that would be great too! Keep posting, I'm listening:)-Dana