The Day After

[dgolding]

This tune was buzzing around in my head for ages, until I managed to exorsise it by recording it. Now I don't know if I love it or hate it. http://www.myspace.com/davidgoldingmusicIts called 'The Day After'.

[mazz]

Hi David,Nice guitar playing. Very fluid and emotionally connected."Music to Sleep By" is a subject close to my heart. In the 80s I did a ton of ambient "space" music with a collaborator and when we fell asleep mixing one of our 18 minute extravaganzas we considered that a real success (no lie) If you were to pursue this piece (which I encourage) and take it to the next level, I respectfully offer a couple of suggestions:(A caveat: All of this is based on listening to your mp3 from myspace which, unfortunately is difficult given the atrouciously low bit rate you are forced to use when you upload to them . I'm sure your mix sounds much better even at 128.) 1. Your piano sound is too bright right off the bat. When the guitar comes in, the highs in the piano fight with the guitar, which is obviously your main voice and needs to have its own sonic space.2. Start the guitar melody more sparsely. Take your time.3. Add the keys and strings earlier. If the piano took up less sonic/frequency space, an arrangement strategy would become more obvious to you and a build that supports the melody musically and emotionally would present itself.You have a very nice touch on the guitar and with some thought and loving care, the full potential of this piece will be realized.Mazz

[dgolding]

Thanks Mazz, I initially inteded it to be just guitar and piano. I wanted to see if I could hold one to the listener's ears with a lot of production. I quickly gave in and added the bass, cellos and strings, it just seemed to be crying out for it.I'll try the changes you mentioned and see how it comes out. Thanks.