Take a good song and make it better?
Posted: Sun Jun 25, 2006 2:10 pm
One of the most popular songs on my CD has been "Benefits". But I put it through quite a bit of industry feedback and did a rewrite.Thanks especially to Taxi screeners, Hookstown, Matt, Casey, Dale Kawashima, Pamela Phillips Oland, West Coast Songwriters, Brian Rawlings and others.I think it made a good song better but I'd really like your thoughts. It isn't recorded yet, just let me know what you think of the lyrics. You can read the original at http://nomiyah.com/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=9. Thanks for your help.NomiBENEFITS(Words & music by Nomi Yah)Verse 1I ask for a kiss and nothing moreGet your cheek going out the doorThat’s just a gestureYou act like you don’t even believe in loveLike it’s a thing you’re suspicious ofWhile you make aPlan to be my manWithout promising anythingWithout promising anythingChorusIs there a way that I could alter your point of viewProve to you the benefitsIs there a way that I could offer you comfort toDemonstrate the benefitsDon’t underestimate the benefits of being in loveBenefits of being in loveVerse 2You ask why I’m tripping about this thingIs it because of a wedding ringThat’s just a symbolYou act like you’re superior, unimpressedAnd love’s inferior at it’s bestA myth we cling toConfident thatYou’re not missing anythingNot missing anythingChorusIs there a way that I could alter your point of viewProve to you the benefitsIs there a way that I could offer you comfort toDemonstrate the benefitsDon’t underestimate the benefits of being in loveBenefits of being in love