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Greeting good people of Taxi.com

I would like some feedback on an acoustic instrumental I am considering for submission. Please offer your constructive criticisms and I appreciate the time.

http://www.reverbnation.com/tunepak/2737977

Thank you

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I like the composition. It has a nice feel.

Hi Glen. Nice tune! Reminds me of the Shadows. All you need is a whammy bar! I think some of the drum fills are over-complicated (e.g. 0.50) for the relaxed vibe of the guitars. The timing on the strummed acoustic could be tighter in a couple of places. This would work for a Muzak-type listing. Cheers, Doug

THANKS for the feedback! I agree with the muzak type thing...as I was listening to it while producing it, I thought this would be cool to listen to in an elevator...LOL.
Thanks again for commenting.

A few suggestions to improve this song:

1. This was mentioned before, but simplify the drum fills. They do not fit with the relaxed mood of the song.

2. Re-record the bass. It could be more "in the pocket". As is, it distracts from the ryhthm of the piece rather than provide a foundation.

3. The string sound is synthetic sounding (and possibly tuned a bit flat). Invest in a good sample library such as East/West.

4. Maybe add some reverb to the lead melody and possibly EQ the lead until you get the tone that you are looking for.

Lots of potential here...especially for a MUZAK type listing. Good Luck!

Thank you...will work with those suggestions...
Much appreciated!

wow, real nice tune ... A few tweeks and I think you got a hit ... Already mentioned.. the strings need some work but the idea is great... The drums I think might do better with a brush beat , make them a little softer .. Real nice tune though good job..
Tom

Hey Glen!
Welcome to the forums! ; )
Make sure to introduce yourself over in the "General Hangout" section!
Good to have you aboard!

Rock on, and talk to you more soon!
NIck

Hey Nick THANKS!!!

Thanks everyone for the great feedback. I will take everything into consideration while re-working the song...
Cheers!

Greetings, great minds of Taxi forum.

Here's the re-worked version of the song "Hear me out"

http://www.reverbnation.com/tunepak/2765583

-I've re-worked the drums to eliminate most of the fills.
- Re-worked the bass line to not be so active
-The strings are east-west and have been re-worked
- The lead part has been tweaked with eq and reverb added to help it stand out

Please offer your thoughts..
Thanks
Glen