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This is an song in the Americana style - could do with a little feedback guys.

The track is called homel alone

http://www.myspace.com/trevorsewellmusic

thanks

Trev

I think this is a beautiful song and it's recorded really well. I love your voice. You remind me a lot of Mark Knopfler. Great guitar playing too. Good Luck with it.

Dorothy

Trev:
OK, on the commercial side. There is too much "musical interludes" between the beautiful lyrics. Especially at the end. One of the conventions on this site is that you post the lyrics, so those of us who propose to judge you can do so in a more clinical manner.
On the aethestic side, I absolutely loved all of this. Your voice fit the lyrics, the lyrics fit the melody, what more could anyone ask?
This is a very sweet song.
Ott

Thank you very much for your feedback - I have only just signed up with taxi so I also appreciate you filling me in with info regarding posting lyrics etc.
I'm really pleased you like the song and Ott I take your point about the instrumental breaks - this has been really useful I'll probably ask for some feedback on others as I feel my way into the community. Also I have a taxi account now so I won't need to divert anyone to my myspace. thanks again.
Trev

Really well done. I like the melody and phrasing a lot. I'm with Ott on the fills ... "less is more". Great job.
Steve

I like it a bunch, very 'a la Knopfler', but I kept waiting for the rhythm section to kick in, and when it finally did, over three minutes in, it was still very stiff; not the sweeping, lilting 6/8 feel I was expecting. I think it wants, nay, needs to swing, at some point; you've built up this tension, and it doesn't release.

Thanks Mojobone - much appreciated.

Trev

Hi Trevor

For the most part you've got the guts of a great song! I didn't hear much in the way of singing that bothered me so you've got that going on!

The bass and drums both need work to my ears. The drums don't have much sparkle and the bass sort of gets lots in the louder sections. The strat seems a little hot in relation to the other elements though I love the guitar work. I'm not sure I would use the delay on the strat all the way through. Just some thoughts for you to consider.

Good Luck!
Keith

Thanks keith

I'm gonna try to update my blues song tomorrow and then I'll have a look at your comments alongside the track when I can dig the home alone multitrack out - much appreciated.

Trev