WIP - 'No Enemy' Update - NEW Words -you guys are top!
Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2011 2:26 pm
Hi gang! I got a song here called ' No Enemy ' - http://www.taxi.com/wackykites
EDIT Updated version: No Enemy WIP2 !
EDIT - Updated version: No Enemy WIP3 (now called 'heading home')
I've had the first pass , recording and getting a feel together. Now welcoming any ears please!
I left it for a few days listen to gather some notes/thoughts ..
- Tighten up the backing chorus harmonies to ride with the lead vocal (was going for beat notes but sounds a bit sloppy to me)
- left a bit of room for a lead instrument - break after first chorus, but don't know what yet - or straight into the verse and forget it?
- Snares - perhaps been a little over keen, might cut out some extras I played in ?
- bass is washed out?
- one lyric "what you mean to me" thinking of changing to "what comes easily" or similar
- Ending - this is part of a song by the late Elizabeth Cotton called Oh Papa - Any ideas where I would find out about licence? I have googled nearly everything?
geezze its that old it might even be GNU now or something, still, would love to send some thing to her family if I ever got anything .
Anyways! I am about to go in and make a final go at getting this finished I am hoping that I might also get some cool ideas here, or thoughts on the ideas I already have, or just general reactions would be sweet too!
Really appreciate the listen - please rip it to bits!!
Rob
EDIT Updated version: No Enemy WIP2 !
EDIT - Updated version: No Enemy WIP3 (now called 'heading home')
I've had the first pass , recording and getting a feel together. Now welcoming any ears please!
I left it for a few days listen to gather some notes/thoughts ..
- Tighten up the backing chorus harmonies to ride with the lead vocal (was going for beat notes but sounds a bit sloppy to me)
- left a bit of room for a lead instrument - break after first chorus, but don't know what yet - or straight into the verse and forget it?
- Snares - perhaps been a little over keen, might cut out some extras I played in ?
- bass is washed out?
- one lyric "what you mean to me" thinking of changing to "what comes easily" or similar
- Ending - this is part of a song by the late Elizabeth Cotton called Oh Papa - Any ideas where I would find out about licence? I have googled nearly everything?
geezze its that old it might even be GNU now or something, still, would love to send some thing to her family if I ever got anything .
Anyways! I am about to go in and make a final go at getting this finished I am hoping that I might also get some cool ideas here, or thoughts on the ideas I already have, or just general reactions would be sweet too!
Really appreciate the listen - please rip it to bits!!
Rob
No Enemy - http://www.taxi.com/wackykites
Like black ice do I never see
The events that lead to be the hardships
but you are no enemy
Two roots, like a plant (think change to let us plant)
Set apart so we may grow something together
yeah, you are no enemy
Yet I pretend, I hope, I relate, I misshape
I don't know what's got into me
I'm no more, just taking some time
Then I'll show what you mean to me
(think change to, 'what comes easily' - what I'm trying to get over is - ' a little full up, need to recharge but nothing personal' )
I'm working on overtime,
got my diary and pencilled in the summer time (thinking of changing something around, 'keep rescheduling the summer time')
I am my own enemy
Yet I pretend, I hope, I relate, I misshape
I don't know what's got into me
I'm no more, just taking some time
Then I'll show what you mean to me
Oh Papa, papa don't care for you
don't care for you