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Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Wed Sep 12, 2012 2:46 pm
by Silversun
Hi All

Would appreciate any feedback on out latest effort. Still working on it but Ive always found it pays to put it up here as soon as its listenable :)

Its called "Break your spell - WIP " and its first track here:

http://taxi.com/silversun

Cheers everybody peeps !

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Wed Sep 12, 2012 5:22 pm
by nick.moxsom
Good start. Two things stood out for me.

1. that wobbly dubsteppy thing seemed out of place over the arpeg piano intro, especially since there was no repeat of it.

2. the synth riff on the chorus is pretty busy – you might try a few alternatives, see which one sticks in your head the next day.

Re-post as it develops.

Nick

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2012 7:49 am
by Silversun
Cheers Nick

That intro effect does reappear as sectin builds later on. You could be right though.Ive replaced with another version with something more sympathetic to the piano at the intro to vse.

I quite like the synth line....maybe ill try giving it the fiddle later see if anything else sticks. Cheers


'break your spell'
http://taxi.com/silversun

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2012 8:52 am
by nick.moxsom
Much better.

Nick

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2012 5:39 pm
by tordenspyd
Well made track. Catchy. Full of popular ingredients.
I heard the first version, I agree with Nick that this sounds much better.
(In the first version; the synth in the beginning had a signal effect, it was used later, still it was a clash, while your new version the new part has that signal effect (telling it is ot a Cold Play mimicked track)) Thumbs up.

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2012 4:34 pm
by Silversun
Ta Chaps. Appreciate the listen.
that signal effect (telling it is ot a Cold Play mimicked track)) Thumbs up.
Interesting. Certainly wouldn't have thought coldplay, but we'll take that as a compliment ! Cheers. Now all we need is their sales figures :)

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Tue Sep 18, 2012 1:18 am
by OrionSatori
Silversun wrote:Hi All

Would appreciate any feedback on out latest effort. Still working on it but Ive always found it pays to put it up here as soon as its listenable :)

Its called "Break your spell - WIP " and its first track here:

http://taxi.com/silversun

Cheers everybody peeps !

This is a great song. I'm listening on really crappy ear buds, and it's still great. Good songwrinting/composition. I like the lead in the chorus, but the synth sounds a little dated. I would mess around with some presets or different synths and try to come up with a different tambre, but that's me. I'm also not too fond of the pitch correction. Sometimes, it can work and I'm not totally against it, but it just doesn't feel right. Almost like it's used to cover up a lot of problems with the singer's pitch than as a stylistic effect. Overall, great work, though.

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Tue Sep 18, 2012 12:52 pm
by Silversun
This is a great song. I'm listening on really crappy ear buds, and it's still great. Good songwrinting/composition. I like the lead in the chorus, but the synth sounds a little dated. I would mess around with some presets or different synths and try to come up with a different tambre, but that's me. I'm also not too fond of the pitch correction. Sometimes, it can work and I'm not totally against it, but it just doesn't feel right. Almost like it's used to cover up a lot of problems with the singer's pitch than as a stylistic effect. Overall, great work, though.
Cheers for the input. Good points. The autotune basically is covering up the rough vocal at the moment.Vocals arent finished. Although I suspect we'll use it as an effect still when done properly. Ive done a new version and played with a new synth line. I know what you mean about the dated bit. If you get a chance would appreciate hearing if you think its an improvement.

Ta

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Tue Sep 18, 2012 1:07 pm
by nick.moxsom
Great improvement.

I know I said the dubstep line on the intro was out of place, but you know what...?

I can now hear a lovely fat LFO wave on your choruses, at 1:00, 2:00 and 3:00, with the drums (which need some punch) at half tempo. You know, like Alex Clare's 'Too Close'? Least, that's how I hear it.

Good work. You've got great production skills.

Nick

Re: Pop/Electro Work in progress

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 12:47 am
by Silversun
Thanks nick. Kind words.

I love that Alex Clare track. Like his stuff in general.Mmmm...... something to think about there. Cheers.