Mending Music (Need critique before pitch)

[LooknGlass]

I have the melody, and I'm pitching this to a local band (some good top notch musicians) that I have been in talks with. I need a clear, honest critique from different eyes, especially from a musicians if possible.


(Vs)
Oh give me an upbeat rhythm that will take away my blues
Play me something special that I've never listened to
Let the lyrics be uplifting, so I want to sing along
play me, play me, a good old healing song

(Ch)
Put on mending music
send me to another place
where the pain will be forgotten
where a smile will cross my face
Yea put on some mending music
Cause I sure could use it
Please, please, put on some mending music

(Vs)
If you're gonna play the jukebox, don't be playin nothin sad
Don't need to be reminded that things are going bad
My heart is yearning something, that'll make it want to beat
Give me, give me, the medicine it needs

(Ch)
Put on mending music
send me to another place
where the pain will be forgotten
where a smile will cross my face
Yea put on some mending music
Cause I sure could use it
Please, please, put on some mending music

(Bridge)
I've ran into a stroke of bad luck
and I'm feeling kinda down
Want to drink my drink and just not think
let the songs turn things around

(Ch)
Put on mending music
send me to another place
where the pain will be forgotten
where a smile will cross my face
Yea put on some mending music
Cause I sure could use it
Please, please, put on some mending music

© L. James Tanner

[funsongs]

For what it's worth...
It does read like a drinking song, if that's what you're going for.
It paints a pretty clear image of someone hanging out, possibly even "wallowing", in an old bar;
maybe a cowboy or blues-type song & place.

Does that help?
Cheers,
Peter R.
www.soundcloud.com/funsongs-1

[LooknGlass]

For what it's worth...
It does read like a drinking song, if that's what you're going for.
It paints a pretty clear image of someone hanging out, possibly even "wallowing", in an old bar;
maybe a cowboy or blues-type song & place.

Does that help?
Cheers,
Peter R.
http://www.soundcloud.com/funsongs-1

Thanks Peter, that does help, I was shooting for a bar song from the get go. Country/Blues