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This inspiration came to me from a customer who is a "Chronic Complainer". I work in retail so I tried to convey this as best I could. It is a very frustrating thing that happens quite often in this new world and quite frankly it's annoying. Let me know what you think.

People always complaining
Nothing's ever right
Trying to get something for nothing
Every day and night

Make another phone call
Get on the internet
When will I get my free stuff
I don't see it yet

You're a chronic complainer
That's all you ever do
You're a chronic complainer
With another bad attitude

Maybe This is Too cynical. Im interested in opinions.

mobster85 wrote:Maybe This is Too cynical. I'm interested in opinions.

The subject matter has possibilities... but may gain more attention and traction if you were to take a less-serious, more humor/sarcastic approach; using some play-on-words/cliches...
stuff that people encounter on common grounds and in their daily routine.
Does that help? Or, does that just read like a complaint?
I think you need to put it in the form of telling a relate-able story.

Cheers.
Peter

Interesting concept with some good points and a strong basis to be expanded on.
I do think that funsongs has made a good point.
Working with those ideas would definitely make it more interesting, believable and saleable.