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here's a song with a couple of possibilities, well I think so anyway (pop or R&B) appreciate any input from you guys, or if any composer likes it enough, rattle out a tune for it! all input welcome, by the way this is only my second post on Taxi, my first many moons ago, but, I'll be dropping in on others by the by.

A Close Run Thing

I grew up on Chicago streets
And took some bad advice
I hung out with the wrong crowd
Those guys weren’t very nice

I made some bad decisions
Now my wheels are short of gas
And if the FBI get hold of me
They gonna cream my sorry-ass

I’ve got to keep on running
I can see they’re closing in
But if I keep the hammer down
It’s gonna be a close run thing

They’re in the rear-view mirror
And not too far behind
I’ve got to keep myself together
And pay those guys no mind

One day the law will catch me
But god I’ll make it hard
Cause I’m a wanted fugitive
Got to go the whole nine yards

I’ve got to keep on running
I can see they’re closing in
But if I keep the hammer down
It’s gonna be a close run thing

I’ve made it to the interstate
And if my ride can take the load
I’m gonna leave behind those law dogs
And tear me up some road

I’ve got to keep on running
I can see they’re closing in
But if I keep the hammer down
It’s gonna be a close run thing

Repeat/Fade
It’s gonna be a close run thing, gonna be a close run thing

8.4.11

Jon Bek Darlington UK. ©

Hi Jon,

Thank you for posting your lyrics. My comments are below

1) There is a clear narrative here which is great but I feel the lyrics are a bit elementary (i.e. "those guys weren't really nice")
2) "They’re in the rear-view mirror/And not too far behind" The second half is redundant as if an object is in your rearview mirror, it is know that it's close.

Thanks!

Elizabeth