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Re: The Battle Cry

Posted: Thu May 07, 2015 1:26 pm
by TheFates
Hi Jolan,

Thanks for sharing! I vote for "I will stand in front not behind" for the second line and "So let bullets fly" for the third.

I really like the chorus though I would change "shot in the behind" to "shot from behind"

In Verse 2, I think the first two lines are redundant as you've already explained that you fight for what you believe in and how you choose to live your life.

Hope this helps!

Elizabeth

Re: The Battle Cry

Posted: Thu May 07, 2015 1:40 pm
by TheFates
The song seems quite serious lyrically which is why "shot in the behind" seems out of place.

Re: The Battle Cry

Posted: Thu May 14, 2015 5:18 am
by the1lyricistmm
Hmmm...how about:

I'll stand for what's right
So let the bullets fly