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Hi all,

I'm trying to make my lyrics more conversational and clear without losing details or concrete imagery. I'd love any feedback on the following. Will probably add a bridge and final chorus later but not 100% on that. Thanks!

Fly Away

key in the door I don’t want to open
don’t wanna pick up yesterday’s fight again
does it matter which one of us let the cold in
cause right now we just argue in circles
never feels worth it
frost on every surface

the time has come to fly away
open up this cage’s door
no reason not to fly away
we can spread our wings outside these bars
the time’s come to fly away
waited so long to soar
finally let’s fly away
fly much higher when we fly apart

why be so sad that things didn’t work out?
nothing is perfect, why be mad when it’s not?
cause it’s not like we ran at the very first doubt

and if our home will never be sweet then
why keep repeating
patterns we keep feeding

the time has come to fly away
open up this cage’s door
no reason not to fly away
we can spread our wings outside these bars
the time has come to fly away
waited so long to soar
finally let’s fly away
fly much higher when we fly apart

I like the lyrics and story...I'd say add a bridge and you have a quality song...I would love to hear the melody you have in mind. VERY nice lyrics!

So - this story is about an amicable split & breakup from a tried, but unsuccessful, relationship... yes?
Which then results in, and is resolved with, a sense of freedom... perhaps to explore new ones.
I'm curious to read your idea of a contrasting/complementing Bridge; and hear it all put to music.
Hope that encourages you on this journey.
Cheers.

Hi Mwb2, I think this is a story many can relate to, I understand and can picture this struggle clearly. Happy music making!
-Noell

Definitely add a bridge and this will be a solid song.

Imagery is there. I can see it playing out as if acted in video. Yes, add a bridge but do not take it too far from what you have here. Very nice!