Would appreciate critique on country (ish) lyrics
Posted: Tue Jul 23, 2019 2:55 am
I'd really appreciate a critique of lyrics-in-the-making.
Feel like a country-suited set.
I'll say no more...
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Leaving For The Last Time
verse 1
Dropped the keys through the letter box
My footsteps echo down the stairs, one last time
I'm hailing down a taxi, mind so numb, in tears,
That it's come to this at last, after many hollow years
And the history's heavy on my mind
But given comfort, given time, I'll make the best of
what's left, and even what I left behind
Chorus
Leaving for the last time
Cause my time's too valuable
Leaving for the last time
But I couldn't say
You wouldn't listen
You've your lessons to learn, and I've got to get away from you
So I'm leaving for the last time (x2)
Verse 2
Not sure if my way is up or down for now
But I know that these are changes that I'll push through, somehow
And the friends you left behind still walk along with me
So I'll be safe to be, who I choose to be
Chorus 2
Leave for the last time
Cause you clouded all my sunshine
Leaving for the last time
Make a final claim, on what is mine
My soul's been waiting to rise up and light its rightful freedom
So I'm leaving for the last time (x2)
Feel like a country-suited set.
I'll say no more...
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Leaving For The Last Time
verse 1
Dropped the keys through the letter box
My footsteps echo down the stairs, one last time
I'm hailing down a taxi, mind so numb, in tears,
That it's come to this at last, after many hollow years
And the history's heavy on my mind
But given comfort, given time, I'll make the best of
what's left, and even what I left behind
Chorus
Leaving for the last time
Cause my time's too valuable
Leaving for the last time
But I couldn't say
You wouldn't listen
You've your lessons to learn, and I've got to get away from you
So I'm leaving for the last time (x2)
Verse 2
Not sure if my way is up or down for now
But I know that these are changes that I'll push through, somehow
And the friends you left behind still walk along with me
So I'll be safe to be, who I choose to be
Chorus 2
Leave for the last time
Cause you clouded all my sunshine
Leaving for the last time
Make a final claim, on what is mine
My soul's been waiting to rise up and light its rightful freedom
So I'm leaving for the last time (x2)