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verse or chorus
Posted: Wed Apr 01, 2020 2:39 am
by JannieM
This little lyric popped into my head when I was half asleep this morning.
"Why does it take
a catastrophe
for us to be
kinder to each other"
What do you think fits this lyric more - as a verse OR as a chorus ?
Thoughts please!
Jan
Re: verse or chorus
Posted: Wed Apr 01, 2020 8:33 am
by funsongs
JannieM wrote: ↑Wed Apr 01, 2020 2:39 am
This little lyric popped into my head when I was half asleep this morning.
"Why does it take
a catastrophe
for us to be
kinder to each other"
What do you think fits this lyric more - as a verse OR as a chorus ?
Thoughts please!
Jan
Putting on my "Robin Frederick hat" - WWRS (What Would Robin Say?) - good to ask a question: probably early, and in Verse, to set up your answer/payoff in the Chorus.
So - I think you have the first Verse there.
And - the payoff line in the Chorus ought to be in the title. If you come up with your solution/message to the question - you'll be well on your way to having a proper-good song.
Just an opinion - want help with it? Or do you wanna complete the thought on your own?
Cheers.
Re: verse or chorus
Posted: Wed Apr 01, 2020 2:12 pm
by cosmicdolphin
MIddle 8
Re: verse or chorus
Posted: Wed Apr 01, 2020 3:09 pm
by funsongs
JannieM wrote: ↑Wed Apr 01, 2020 2:39 am
This little lyric popped into my head when I was half asleep this morning.
"Why does it take
a catastrophe
for us to be
kinder to each other"
What do you think fits this lyric more - as a verse OR as a chorus ?
Thoughts please!
Jan
Middle 8 - aka, as a Bridge - could certainly work just as well.
+1
Re: verse or chorus
Posted: Wed Apr 01, 2020 6:39 pm
by JannieM
Thanks for your responses. For the moment, I think I will keep stirring some ideas around and see what bakes - cookies or cakes.
Good possibility this lyric becomes a bridge.
Jan
Re: verse or chorus
Posted: Sun Apr 12, 2020 2:01 pm
by cconfident
Sounds like a good pre-chorus leading up to the punch!
Re: verse or chorus
Posted: Mon Apr 13, 2020 1:16 pm
by AlanHall
For me it could be either: it depends entirely where the song is going.
As an opening verse, I can hear a plaintive voice asking this, then follow with a bigger protest/ social criticism kind of piece.
On the other hand, if the verses were "today I saw <somebody doing something nice for somebody>" then the chorus (or bridge, good bridge!) would fit well with the lyric you wrote. This use gives me the sense of a much more positive, encouraging song. Wistful, yes. Sad, maybe. But hopeful and positive.