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Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:02 am
by good4somethingbum
Going the DistanceMorning set the hills ablaze as it glowed brightlyCrossing seas and borderlinesSunshine travels far because it travels lightlyShouldering just shade and timeBut there’s more than dawn, to the day’s existenceAnd shadows that move on, are going the distanceThere’s a horseman who’s unhindered by all fencesRiding past where rainbows rustHe forsakes the weight of wealth because he sensesAll gold touches turns to dustFor lives of ease and rest, find the most resistanceA rich man’s greatest test, is going the distanceAll men are forever crawling, riding, climbingFinding passage to their fateShedding skin and silver till their souls are shiningWhen they pass that western gateCos there’s more than breath, to the day’s existenceAnd there’s more than death, to going the distance©2007 Robert George

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:06 am
by mikehelms
Nice very Nice!!! Michael

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:08 am
by good4somethingbum
thanks Mike! honestly, it's more of a poem. I wrote it real fast Friday night but just had the chance to type it.

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:17 am
by mikehelms
Yeah I thought as much from the rythem... although I dont think it would take a whole lot of adjusment to make it a song.! It would only be a little stilted tring to sing it as is in fact!!! Michael

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:19 am
by good4somethingbum
yeah...a word here and there might need to be changed or dropped.

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:23 am
by mikehelms
Yeah an 'is' or 'and' ... maybe an 'all' to the going the distance on the shadows line Kind of thing ... It would depend on the syllabic pattern the music set in creating the melody line

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 9:02 am
by bc
That's one of your best Robert. It evokes the rural nature of my life. bc

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 7:28 pm
by sgs4u
Rob, aaahhthat is just as beautiful the 10th time I read it

Re: Going the Distance

Posted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 6:33 am
by good4somethingbum
thanks again guys...I'm appalled that folks like this so much. I coughed it out Friday night while watching an ep of Buffy. a character said something about "traveling light" and I just spun the idea from that phrase.