What Momma Told Me

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What Momma Told Me

Post by dtrainddog » Wed Aug 18, 2021 5:32 pm

Hi all,

I'm picturing this as a mid tempo Inspirational Country or Southern Gospel song. I could use any feedback. Thanks so much.

“What Momma Told Me”

(v1)
My momma told me bible stories when I was very small
About the battle of Jericho and how the walls did fall
She talked about old Noah and the great mighty flood
But my favorite part was the cross and how Jesus shed His blood

(Chorus)
My momma told me stories I knew by heart to the end
I put my trust in Jesus when tears were my best friends
I learned about my Savior while sitting on her knee
I’ve been blessed with the stories my momma told me

(v2)
She talked about the greatest stories I ever heard
I learned lessons about faith and hope through God’s word
Only God knew how my broken heart fit His master plan
I could feel God's love with the touch of my mothers hand

(Repeat Chorus)

(Bridge)
There's no tear God didn't see, He saw the trials I went through
Looking back I know that His promises are true

(Repeat Chorus)

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Re: What Momma Told Me

Post by Zaychi » Fri Aug 20, 2021 2:45 am

I think there are some problems with the meter... most of it is in TA-ta-TA-ta-TA structure (there's a Greek word for that but I forgot), but in some places you have an extra or missing syllable which will make it hard to fit into an actual vocal. I added them to the side in parenthesis:

My momma told me bible stories when I was very small (stories when)
About the battle of Jericho and how the walls did fall (battle of)
She talked about old Noah and the great mighty flood
But my favorite part was the cross and how Jesus shed His blood (was the)

(Chorus)
My momma told me stories I knew by heart to the end (to the)
I put my trust in Jesus when tears were my best friends
I learned about my Savior while sitting on her knee
I’ve been blessed with the stories my momma told me (momma told)

(v2)
She talked about the greatest stories I ever heard (I ever)
I learned lessons about faith and hope through God’s word (God's word)
Only God knew how my broken heart fit His master plan
I could feel God's love with the touch of my mothers hand (with the, of my)

(Repeat Chorus)

(Bridge)
There's no tear God didn't see, He saw the trials I went through
Looking back I know that His promises are true

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