A little help please

[sillyrobin]

What’s up my fellow Taxi members? I know it’s not the typical genre of music here… But If possible would you mind checking out my music and possibly giving me some pointers or feedback? http://www.myspace.com/sillyrobin Only listen to believe if rap music is not your thing.

[davewalton]

Quote:What’s up my fellow Taxi members? I know it’s not the typical genre of music here… But If possible would you mind checking out my music and possibly giving me some pointers or feedback? http://www.myspace.com/sillyrobin Hey Robin,I'm definitely not the guy to give feedback on this genre. The forum isn't exactly littered with Hip Hop experts but the ones that are here are really very good. Hopefully one or two of them can come in and help with the feedback. Dave

[sgs4u]

I'm gonna listen to In My Bed, cause I like the title.Nice Rap - disqualifies the tune "as is" for a few things, only because of the swearing. the chorus is deadly out of tune, but so what. you could also think about a more abrupt ending. you talk about having a posse, I think you need to get that sound, into the recording. I also think you could use some pretty girls singing witchu in the chorus, some kind of counter-point, or girls perspective. Right now, you just don't quite sound BIG enough. Everything there you've done, is cool to me. I like everything.yep, I'm 47, what do I knowI know, I'm not an expertQuote:What’s up my fellow Taxi members? I know it’s not the typical genre of music here… But If possible would you mind checking out my music and possibly giving me some pointers or feedback? http://www.myspace.com/sillyrobin

[diogenes]

"She keeps her muff hairs fluffy"-now thats a memorable lyric.

[sillyrobin]

[quote author=sgs4u board=peer thread=1193175488 post=1193177126]I'm gonna listen to In My Bed, cause I like the title.Nice Rap - disqualifies the tune "as is" for a few things, only because of the swearing. the chorus is deadly out of tune, but so what. you could also think about a more abrupt ending. you talk about having a posse, I think you need to get that sound, into the recording. I also think you could use some pretty girls singing witchu in the chorus, some kind of counter-point, or girls perspective. Right now, you just don't quite sound BIG enough. Everything there you've done, is cool to me. I like everything.yep, I'm 47, what do I knowI know, I'm not an expertI asked......I must apologize for the swear words. I guess I should let everyone know that before they view the page.but the song believe isn't offensive. so if rap music isn't your thing only view ......believe

[sgs4u]

Jes do watcha gotta do man, no big thing. I'll check out the other tune, soon.Quote:I asked......I must apologize for the swear words. I guess I should let everyone know that before they view the page.but the song believe isn't offensive. so if rap music isn't your thing only view ......believe

[gitarrero]

I'll try to give a feedback. note I'm not an expert in hiphop, though I have some credits in that field (tv series - I'm working mostly in that field, so I will give you a feedback from that perspective).* the picture on your myspace-site looks very amateurish - not because of what's writen ("love it..."), but just the look, colors etc* the flow: good rap, but I miss some dynamics/contrast, it's a little tiring to listen to this "machinegun rap" all through the song. e.g. sing a line in the chorus, rap in the verses.* in my bed: your singing is out of tune. the panning (left/right) of some instruments is too extreme. but the drums & the bass in the middle.overall: I think you have potential. if I was you I would correct the issues that are not up to par yet. it would be helpfull to know what you want to achieve with your music - there are diffrent criterias for artist than for composer for tv shows, for examples. cheers,martin

[neuphoria]

your double time flow's pretty good, but i think it would work much much better with:1) dirtier beats-- use some downsampling on the snares, distort the bass, etc2) slightly faster bpm-- works better on the floorSpank Rock is a good sonic reference, check em out-- nasty raps, etcand for the low-fi production hypersexual lyrics, check out the artist Peaches as a reference, nasty basses, minimal beats but not thin.i liked The Music, thought it was fun in a badboy Eminem kinda way. keep it up

[sillyrobin]

Quote:I'll try to give a feedback. note I'm not an expert in hiphop, though I have some credits in that field (tv series - I'm working mostly in that field, so I will give you a feedback from that perspective).* the picture on your myspace-site looks very amateurish - not because of what's writen ("love it..."), but just the look, colors etc* the flow: good rap, but I miss some dynamics/contrast, it's a little tiring to listen to this "machinegun rap" all through the song. e.g. sing a line in the chorus, rap in the verses.* in my bed: your singing is out of tune. the panning (left/right) of some instruments is too extreme. but the drums & the bass in the middle.overall: I think you have potential. if I was you I would correct the issues that are not up to par yet. it would be helpfull to know what you want to achieve with your music - there are diffrent criterias for artist than for composer for tv shows, for examples. cheers,martinThank you for your help I appreciate it. It’s hard to find useful constructive criticism. Normally the only people I can ask are friends, family or just some average listener on Myspace. All they ever tell you is that your music sounds great. That's fine but it doesn’t really help you much..If there's something wrong with the song I would like to know.what you said was excellent advice..thanks

[davewalton]

Quote:Thank you for your help I appreciate it. It’s hard to find useful constructive criticism. Normally the only people I can ask are friends, family or just some average listener on Myspace. All they ever tell you is that your music sounds great. That's fine but it doesn’t really help you much..If there's something wrong with the song I would like to know.Family and friends don't really provide very good perspective when you're trying to find out how you fare as a small fish being tossed into a big, big ocean. Same with some places that offer critiques as part of their hosting plans. One guy came here after getting a glowing "professional" review of his daughter's song, complaining about not getting forwarded, etc. I think it was Michael Laskow (Taxi Grand Pubah) himself that said... "Ask the guy that said the track was hit material to lend you $50,000 as startup money for professional services like recording, publicity, etc and you'll split the millions in royalties from the "hit" song. When he doesn't lend you the money and you ask why... that's when you get the REAL critique". You've got a great attitude and frame of mind. It's that kind of thing that leads to success... certainly not "WHAT??? THESE SONGS ARE ALL GREAT, MY FAMILY AND FRIENDS LOVE THEM!!! SORRY I ASKED!!". That comes up from time to time. BTW, you can send material in for "custom critiques". You send the track, along with a list of questions that you'd like answered and a screener that screens in that genre will give you a fairly detailed critique. I think the level of detail kind of depends on the number of questions you want answered.