A Sad, Korean Lullaby "Ja Jang Ka"

[silvercord]

Hello all, its late at night, I have insomnia (kinda in a good way;)and what better way to spend it than uploadin a song to sharewith you all....this is a mournful Korean song I wrote and sang on.Korean taxi friends out there, if any forgive my mikuk accent;)thanks to Choi. for the wonderful lyricsas usually, i would love to know what you thinkHere is: "Lullaby (Ja Jang Ka)" due to my i dont know-ness of how to post the new style links, please please go here to stream or download the song "Lullaby (ja jang ka)":www.taxi.com/silvercordDOWNLOAD:http:// ... a_.mp3Here are the translated lyrics:I met you in a dream last nightyou remain on medo you miss me. do you?A day like today you visit meand touch me by moonstruck hands.if only you could come to me just for one day. I'm afraid of tomorrow. please..A day resumes without you.At your numbed grave saddened with blue grief. where is our eternal promise.. A day like today you visit meand touch me by moonstruck hands.if only you could come to me just one day.I'm afraid of tomorrow. please..I hear your sweet voiceI'm coming. to you.

[bwrenhewmach]

My dear friend Geoff What a wonderful beautiful song. Your vocals are the very best I have heard you do thus far. I'm so impressed my friend. Hope you are doing well. mB

[jay10music]

GEOFF.........I AM WITH MB ON THIS ONE ........So smooth and Hypmotizing.....And the vocal is superb!! Oh!..and how can I forget the feeling u put in this peice...absolutly GREAT...Jay...

[jchitty]

Very soothing piece, Geoff...I enjoyed listening to it.

[feaker]

Got to be smokin somethin to sing like that. Very niceBetween you amd mb, you guys mellow me right out.Your stuff gets better each time.Paul

[silvercord]

thanks so much Jay, Bill and Chits!!!!im stoked you dug this one...i wasnt sure what the crew would think:)Haha Paul, man i sure wasn't smokin anything(did i mention that doing so lands you in prison quicker than you can say "no no...i didnt smoke here..i smoked in Amsterdam..no no dont put those handcuffs on me...im rastafarian, see..itspart of my religion!"(sigh)i do have a little secret about recording vocals thoughi wont lie..i do MANY takes of EACH vocal phrase..and when i type MANY i mean MANY;) thats the beauty of having a home studio..you can redo thatphrase until is resembles something use-able...also...i really go slowly when i mix, orchestrate and add effectsi envy producers that can do everything quickly and have itcome out sounding like they spent tons of time working on ias often said in Korea I.N.V.U^^peace all!

[jay10music]

WELL GUESS WHAT KID....U GOT YOUR MOJO WORKING....BIG TIME... jayman... .

[silvercord]

Hey thanks Jay!..and if we both colab together..thenwe would have "CROSS MOJONATION" now wouldnt that be cool?^^

[bwrenhewmach]

You Know Geoff The more I listen to this song the more I fall in love with it. My wife listened to it this morning and said she also thought it was one of your best songs. She said the vocals are just right but I think they could be louder just a matter of preference I guess. How do you think this kind of song would do on the radio where you are? If you think it would go over as well as I do I would be proud to do what I can to get it to the air waves my friend. You know the market there better than I do. Let me know. your not so wild and crazy friend mild Bill

[gongchime]

Your singing is VERY good on this tune. Great production. Melodies and counter melodies are nice. The intro is followed by another intro followed by a kind of transition stating the arpeggiated accompaniment before you start singing. Don't DO that!!! You've got 4 measures of intro before people will turn you off. Separately, the first two intros are nice but execs will be confused if you give both. Is this an instrumental tune or a vocal tune? It really can't be both. Perhaps you've got until :13 to state your intro in my opinion. I think the first one is better because it's obvious the violins are samples in the second intro, although the melodic writing/ bass are nice. My advice is to hack it out with an ax regardless. Don't need it. It can be the basis for a different tune. Not this one. The first intro is still too long but hacking out the second one is minimally something that needs to happen in my opinion. The rhythmically-even arpeggiated piano accompaniment is a bit boring. And the samples for the stabs sound artificial as does the counter melody sample that plays when you stop singing. The arpeggiated accompaniment might work better if it wasn't rhythmically even. A dotted rhythm seems like it would function more effectively which is something you do here and there in the tune already. Instead of 1+2+3+etc... how about 1...a2...3....a4 for the arpeggiated accompaniment's rhythm?When the piano starts comping chords, is REALLY working well for me. I feel the sections shouldn't be so different texturally. I'd like to hear a rhythmically similar yet simpler chording thing to occur where you currently have arpeggiated accompaniment. It should be related rhythmically to the comping section but simpler so that movement to the current comping thing will sound like a development. I know that's what you were trying to do with the arpeggiation but it's not working for me. I also think you need better samples to fit your nice countermelodies. Anyway, excellent effort melodically, harmonically, vocally and lyrically. Keep up the good work. Sorry I missed you when I was in Korea but I was really working hard trying to make money which just wasn't happening this trip. I'm back home now.