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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? (pop/rock)

Post by heinsite » Sat Oct 03, 2009 5:22 pm

i'm really hearing a female doing this...and in tunethe chorus needs a bit more lift, but some of that might be the key it's in.i can hear clarkson doing a tune like this...i'd simplify some of the verse lyrics a bit. i don't tell folks what i mean anymore, they get pissed!like the song, great potential, lift the chorus, and in the verse's IMHO try to keep the same tenses...easier to understand and flow...the best,wh

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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? (pop/rock)

Post by watksco » Sat Oct 03, 2009 5:39 pm

Oct 3, 2009, 8:22pm, heinsite wrote:i'm really hearing a female doing this...and in tunethe chorus needs a bit more lift, but some of that might be the key it's in.i can hear clarkson doing a tune like this...i'd simplify some of the verse lyrics a bit. i don't tell folks what i mean anymore, they get pissed!like the song, great potential, lift the chorus, and in the verse's IMHO try to keep the same tenses...easier to understand and flow...the best,whHey Warren, thanks for the listen and the feedback. You can PM 'what you mean' - if you want - promise I won't get pissed!Scott
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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? (pop/rock)

Post by eokamura » Sun Oct 04, 2009 8:53 am

Yeah, nice tune Scott! I'd like to hear a beefier bass and obviously a smoking female vocalist is the key. Good luck with it, re-post when you get it sung, would love to hear how it turns out. eo.

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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? (pop/rock)

Post by watksco » Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:36 pm

Oct 4, 2009, 11:53am, eokamura wrote:Yeah, nice tune Scott! I'd like to hear a beefier bass and obviously a smoking female vocalist is the key. Good luck with it, re-post when you get it sung, would love to hear how it turns out. eo.Hey eo - thanks for the listen. The mix is pretty rough at present - as are a number of the tracks.Cheers,Scott
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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? (pop/rock)

Post by watksco » Wed Oct 07, 2009 1:45 am

Re-recorded the vocal (still me - sorry about that Chief!) with some changes (lyric / melody / music).Thinking of getting a Pro-Critique done here at TAXI for the learning experience, but I want to iron out any obvious blunders first.Go nuts!Cheers,Scott
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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? (pop/rock) **update

Post by billg » Wed Oct 07, 2009 3:06 am

Hey Scott, this is cool & I think with the female vox will be just what you're shooting for. Be sure when you work on the final that you get some bass/low-end going, that's the only thing that really stuck out to me.

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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? (pop/rock) **update

Post by watksco » Wed Oct 07, 2009 12:43 pm

Thanks for the listen BillScott
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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? **mix/prod critique req'

Post by watksco » Tue Nov 03, 2009 2:35 am

Song now with actual female vocal ready for your critique - mix / production ... all the usual.Cheers,Scott
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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? **mix/prod critique req'

Post by billg » Tue Nov 03, 2009 7:18 am

Hey Scott, I think for the genre there is a serious lack of kick drum here. The tone on the bass doesn't have a lot of low-end so a big fat kick is what you need to get this happening.

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Re: Am I Asking Too Much? **mix/prod critique req'

Post by feaker » Tue Nov 03, 2009 7:34 am

ScottHoly cow, this is really good.Love that rhythm guitar work in the verse.Singer is perfect for the tune. Kinda Loperish.Good luck with this one, I think it is going to do well.Paul

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