Am I In This Love Alone?

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Am I In This Love Alone?

Post by Casey H » Sun Sep 13, 2020 12:23 pm

Removed. Thanks!
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Re: Am I In This Alone?

Post by hummingbird » Mon Sep 14, 2020 9:48 am

I like the idea of the song, Casey. I feel like the last line of the first verse isn't congruent with what's gone before, that what happened 'last night' was a sudden veer in direction. I felt like it was going to say 'I always worry and make bad choices, then I met you and everything changed' which doesn't quite fit with the hook, I think?

I really like these lines
Am I rushing things, it hasn’t been that long
Do I measure things by time or how I feel?

IMHO you could start with those two lines and tell us a bit about how she's head over heels, and pay off into your chorus... maybe say a little more about why she is asking if she is in it alone...

hope that helps
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Re: Am I In This Alone?

Post by funsongs » Mon Sep 14, 2020 9:59 am

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Re: Am I In This Alone?

Post by Casey H » Mon Sep 14, 2020 10:34 am

Thanks guys.

Good point, Vikki. The line is a little out of nowhere. I was trying to bridge into chorus as to why she's feeling this way and now waiting for him to text. But it could be better, def.

Also, do you think the chorus itself is weak as far as the payoff line? (Maybe that can't be answered looking at the chorus by itself).

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Re: Am I In This Alone?

Post by Kolstad » Tue Sep 15, 2020 7:22 am

I think maybe the hook might be stronger if it was.. am I in this love alone
It would also present some more options for adlib/backing vocal lines..

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Re: Am I In This Alone?

Post by Casey H » Tue Sep 15, 2020 4:43 pm

Kolstad wrote:
Tue Sep 15, 2020 7:22 am
I think maybe the hook might be stronger if it was.. am I in this love alone
It would also present some more options for adlib/backing vocal lines..

justfwiw
AWESOME suggestion!!! .... "Am I in this LOVE alone?" is much better!!

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Re: Am I In This Love Alone?

Post by Casey H » Mon Sep 21, 2020 7:33 pm

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Re: Am I In This Love Alone?

Post by Casey H » Mon Sep 28, 2020 3:01 pm

Thanks all. Got what I needed, helpful feedback. I removed it now because I know that you all want to steal my words and make millions. :lol: :lol: :lol: :shock: :o :? :roll:

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