Any advice for " Your Own True Self "

[songmaster]

Hi everyone I have been tooling around with a " Lumineers " type song. Any advice would be appreciated.

Your Own True Self

Take the road less traveled
Trade the asphalt in for gravel
Then swim against the tide
And laugh instead of cry
What ever helps
You to find
Your own true self

Take a walk along the river
And be baptized and delivered
Beneath the shady trees
On those banks, you can breathe
Then sit a spell
You might find
Your own true self

Bridge

Look into that river
There's a thousand different faces
But only one of them is you
Your a product of opinions
Since you learned to tie your laces
Never meant for someone elses shoes
Even your own lies, stick like glue...to you

When you finally climb that mountain
And you hear your echo shoutin
Knowing your own two feet
Took you to that high peak
Then all is well
When you find
Your own true self.

[nylyrics]

This is sweet. I like the first two verses especially.

I an not crazy about the word "own" in the title. Granted i dont hear you music but maybe it could be like:

you find yourself
your true self.

Very nice lyrics.

Andy

[songmaster]

Hi Andy Thanks for taking a look at this. I found the title on the internet and it kind of stuck me as a rustic way of saying " finding yourself " which also seemed to work in with my Lumineers type tempo.

Anyway, it gives me something to consider.

Thanks again Tom.

[FeffyShell]

Hi Tom,
I like the imagery that you're working with (asphalt for gravel, walking along the river, climbing mountains, etc.); it really conveys the point of slowing things down, getting back to nature, reconnecting with yourself. I don't really understand the bridge, though. I *think* that what you're saying is that you have to figure out who you really are, and not who you/others think you should be. Is that close?
-Stephanie

[songmaster]

Hi Stephanie Thanks for taking a look at this song. I was really trying to keep this song simple by showing rather than telling. I guess when I got to the bridge I got more philosophical. The point I was trying to make there was that, when we are born, we are molded by a whole bunch of other people, to the point that as we mature we are thinking other peoples thoughts and maybe even following their dreams instead of our own. So, yes, you were right about what the bridge was saying.

The great thing about Taxi is getting great feed back from people like you. So thanks again and like the man said.. Write on!

Tom.