Bar Fight Scene

[swhit]

Hi All,

I was supposed to submit this for a listing with a bar fight scene but missed the early morning deadline.
Anyway, do yo think this would of worked for the listing and should I keep on the back burner for future
ones?

https://soundcloud.com/steven-whitworth/on-fire

MID-to-UPTEMPO ROCK, SOUTHERN ROCK, BLUES ROCK or INDIE ROCK SONGS with MALE VOCALS are URGENTLY needed by the PRODUCER of a FEATURE FILM. The song will be played during a FIGHT SCENE outside a BAR so it's important your song has a GRITTY, TOUGH, MANLY feel a la:

"She's Long Gone" by The Black Keys

They want a song with a great RIFF and a COOL, CONFIDENT VOCAL. Submit songs with some PUMPED UP ENERGY. THINK: BRASH, ROWDY with a FIRE in its belly. Whiskey-soaked fists are flying! They need songs with "BLUE COLLAR" and some "SOUTHERN" appeal. Anything overproduced or too slick will not work. A brash BLUES-ROCK song or a swaggering SOUTHERN ROCK song may also work. INDIE ROCK in the vein of The Black Keys, White Stripes, The Heavy, etc. will also work if it has the required TOUGHNESS.

[BurtHK]

Great track I could see it working. Production wise I'd like the vox up a bit, maybe with a bit of parallel compression or distortion/EQ

Maybe the walk down 'riff' pre- break could be used as an intro?

HTH

Burt

[AmandaAnderson]

We started working on this before a life event got in the way But as far as I can see it fits what they were asking for and the ala.

By the way I also love it My kinda music !

Amanda

[swhit]

Thanks for the reviews. Much appereciated!

[VanderBoegh]

Hey Steve, bummer you missed the deadline for this listing, as I think you would've at least stood a good chance at getting a forward. BUT, this gives you an opportunity to go back in and fine-tune this song a bit more. For my ears, the vocals stand out a bit too much - someone else already mentioned some tricks on how to get them to sit better in the mix. Then, if you're really feeling crazy, try a smoking lead guitar line over parts of the riff just to give it a bit more "balls". Right now, this isn't getting as out-of-control as this Fight Scene listing asked for (but even though you missed the deadline, I think more rambunctiousness would help overall).

~~Matt

[swhit]

Hey thanks Matt. I'll definitely take your comments
into consideration. It was a bit of a rush job but
now I can tweak it as you say.

[singer1]

It's a forward for that listing, in my humble opinion. Your track has true potential for a sync op. If not a fight scene, a movement scene, ( cars on the move, or a plan being implemented ), as it has the masculinity for these scenes. Could even work for one of the car/ motorcycle restoration shows. Keep this one ready in your quiver! You have a winner. D.B.

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[swhit]

Thanks Dave for the compliments, like you say, I'll have it for the next time.

[swhit]

Thanks Dave for the compliments, like you say, I'll have it for the next time.