" Be What You Wanna Be " (Country)

[donmartin]

A light-hearted Country song -Lyrics - Don MartinVocals - Dave ScarboroProduction - EastCrafthttp://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=564081BE WHAT YOU WANNA BE©-2006-Don Martin[verse 1]they said I'd amount to nothing proclaimed like it was fact they said that I couldn't addthat I could not subtract well if they all could see me now they'd have to take it back cause where it says "the manager" is where I hang my hat [chorus]you can be what you wanna be'cause doubt is just a crutch you can be what you wanna bethe sky's not hard to touchI worked up from the bottom without a college degree you can be what you wanna beas a manager trainee [instrumental][verse 2]started in sanitation worked hard to show them all then maitre d' of excellencewith proof hung on the wall and when at station finance I broke bills of every size but sales is where I took the leadas the king of supersize [chorus]you can be what you wanna be'cause doubt is just a crutch you can be what you wanna be the sky's not hard to touch I worked up from the bottom without a college degree you can be what you wanna beas a manager trainee [instrumental][verse 3]I still drive my pickup it's good enough for me an executive with limitson a modest salary I've learned how to get byand to face reality and I thank my lack of creditfor keeping me debt free [chorus]you can be what you wanna be'cause doubt is just a crutch you can be what you wanna bethe sky's not hard to touch I worked up from the bottom without a college degree be, what you wanna be just take a look at me

[hitwriter]

Quote:A light-hearted Country song -Lyrics - Don MartinVocals - Dave ScarboroProduction - EastCrafthttp://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=564081BE WHAT YOU WANNA BE©-2006-Don Martin[verse 1]they said I'd amount to nothing proclaimed like it was fact they said that I couldn't addthat I could not subtract well if they all could see me now they'd have to take it back cause where it says "the manager" is where I hang my hat (Nice verse, could be a bit stronger)[chorus]you can be what you wanna be'cause doubt is just a crutch you can be what you wanna bethe sky's not hard to touchI worked up from the bottom without a college degree (nice Chorus up to here)you can be what you wanna beas a manager trainee (This is not the hook or a very good Chorus ending... it should be the hook here with a line before it. You probably shouldn't specify the Fast Food Manager Trainee stuff... there are many occupations that you can work up in... keep it general so the listener can put his or herself in the song.)[instrumental][verse 2]started in sanitation worked hard to show them all then maitre d' of excellencewith proof hung on the wall and when at station finance I broke bills of every size but sales is where I took the leadas the king of supersize (See above... sanitation, supersize etc..)[chorus]you can be what you wanna be'cause doubt is just a crutch you can be what you wanna be the sky's not hard to touch I worked up from the bottom without a college degree you can be what you wanna beas a manager trainee [instrumental][verse 3]I still drive my pickup it's good enough for me an executive with limitson a modest salary I've learned how to get byand to face reality and I thank my lack of creditfor keeping me debt free (million dollar line!)[chorus]you can be what you wanna be'cause doubt is just a crutch you can be what you wanna bethe sky's not hard to touch I worked up from the bottom without a college degree be, what you wanna be just take a look at me Use the million dollar line to create a nice bridge to break up the song... 2 verses is enough. Make them stronger and you may have a solid Nashville pitch!Best of Luck!

[dada]

Don,Great lyrics... the production is not as great I as I have heard before in some of your projects, but nice groove... it sounds too reverby (is that a word?) especially the guitar tracks.. I do agree with the previous comment in that the arrangement needs something to break it up just little, but stay about the same total song length... keep the words coming Don, I always enjoy your outlook and use of our language..Dave

[donmartin]

Hey HitThe economy demo is certainly lacking the delivery clarity for this to be recognized or understood to be a purposeful tongue-in-cheek success song ....... that was inspired because of witnessing an overly proud McDonald's manager trainee bragging to the lower staff of his climb to executive status ...Your comments are certainly reflective of improvements that would serve to correct a more commercial song effort ..... and I may at some point look at re-writing this lyric into a feel-good success-is-possible song .Appreciate your time and effort , your advise was dead on .Hey DaveIt was meant to be just a fun write , and the economy demo route has helped me to make several re-write decisions before going for any major demo cost .... as well as to recognize when they don't warrant further immediate effort/cost .I appreciate the kind words about my previous works , and perhaps the tongue-in-cheek attitude will come across more clearly in the next couple of posts -- being a couple of sing-along "bar songs .Don.

[edteja]

Don,I think the intent of this comes across wonderfully. I know I've had a couple of tunes bounced by screeners who don't seem to know what irony is, or if they do don't see it as an asset in a country tune (one screener said that he/she actually did a google search on stuff in my song that was made up!!! Then I think that person was ticked to find it wasn't something findable). It does my heart good to hear someone else who is not taking it all too seriously. I enjoyed the song. Possibly a bridge would make it stronger. The lyrics don't need changing to do that, simply rearranging. Good luck to you.

[donmartin]

Hey EdI had this one critiqued at NSAI a few months back (didn't have any new serious efforts at the time) ..... and the screener felt it lacked clarity a good "success" song would need ....... not recognizing it as tongue-in-cheek at all .Not much commercial likelihood here to warrant a second demo , but I will keep the comments on file in case I get that urge .Thanks for the listen .Don