Christmas Rock Instrumental - help please

[burpo]

Hi there, folks:

https://soundcloud.com/burpo/what-child-is-this

Here's a rough mix of "What Child is This?" for the listing below.

Any thoughts are welcome. Thanks in advance.

-b


ROCK-Based CHRISTMAS INSTRUMENTALS (Public Domain and/or Original) and/or INSTRUMENTAL CUES are needed by a Music Supervisor-owned, Non-Exclusive Music Library that’s proactively building a new Christmas Music Catalog. They’re looking for great, Mid-to-Up-Tempo, Classic Rock, Alt Rock, Punk, or Indie Rock Instrumentals and Cues in the broad stylistic range of (but not limited to) the following references:

“Got Something For You” by Best Coast and Wavves

“We Wish You A Merry Christmas” by Weezer

“Christmas All Over Again” by Tom Petty & the Heartbreakers

“Xmas Time Of The Year” by Green Day

“(It’s Gonna Be a) Punk Rock Christmas” by The Ravers

“Christmas Duel” by The Hives & Cyndi Lauper

“Father Christmas” by The Kinks

Although the references have vocals, please submit Instrumentals only for this pitch. And please remember, they need Original and/or Covers of Public Domain Christmas Instrumentals AND/OR Instrumental Cues.

TAXI Tip: If you’re submitting Covers, please do full-length versions. If you’re submitting Original pieces, you can submit Cues or Full-Length pieces.

Give them well-crafted Instrumentals that use Rock-based instrumentation combined with some Christmas elements to create a festive holiday spirit. Sleigh bells, glockenspiel, and/or tubular bells, with a Rock rhythm section is the order of the day for this pitch! If you’re submitting Original Cues, build them around a lively central melodic motif, while adding and subtracting layers of instrumentation as your Cue progresses to keep it forward moving, and interesting throughout. Your Cue submissions should be at least 2 minutes in length, with good edit points and Non-faded endings. Instrumental Covers of Public Domain Songs can run as long the song would normally run and should have non-faded/buttoned endings as well. Do NOT copy or rip off the referenced music in any way, shape, or form. Use it only as a general guide for feel, texture, tone, and vibe. Broadcast Quality is needed (great sounding home recordings are fine).

This company offers a NON-EXCLUSIVE 50/50 deal. Writers will also get a percentage of applicable sync fees, which will be negotiated on a case-by-case basis. If you submit an Original piece of music, you must own or control 100% of the Copyright and Master to pitch for this opportunity. If you are submitting a cover of a public domain piece, you must own or control 100% of the Master. Please submit one to three Instrumental Cues or Full-Length Instrumentals online or per CD. All submissions will be screened on a Yes/No basis by a TAXI screener handpicked by the Library

[burpo]

Mix 2 is up, with less lead guitar.

https://soundcloud.com/burpo/what-child-is-this-surf

[feaker66]

Hi burp bud I am not good at breaking down a song. Sorry bout that. The first thing that comes to mind is the tone of the lead guitar. it just isn't right. Not sure what you have on that amp setting, but it is like a little acid?? hard to describe. Bass and drums sound good to me. Maybe slow it down a touch also?? I didn't comment earlier because I was waiting for one of the mix guys to help first??

Sincerely

Paul

[funsongs]

Well... I cheated a little bit by reading Paul's comment prior to listening to your track.
To these old-dude ears the overall vibe sorta reminds me of Hawai'i Five-O vintage.
Guitar tone certainly is a matter of taste, and what you're after.

As far as the mix goes... the bass & drums are too out-front, and stepping all over the melody the guitar is playing,
rather than sitting as a supportive foundation.
If you're open to suggestions & experiments - try setting the volume of the bass dead even with the kick drum, so that they lock & sound solid... and back 'em off so they sit just a tad lower than the guitar.

Not sure if that's helpful... hope so.
Rock on, Dude.

[burpo]

Thanks, guys!

Will digest.

-b

[burpo]

New mix is up.

: )

https://soundcloud.com/burpo/what-child ... surf-mix-3