Comments on a new song collaboration welcome.

[keystevens]

Hi all,Thanks for the comments for the previous rev3 level. I believe this latest rev4 version fixes some issues. I have a slightly different Intro, different instruments in the background, lower key, BV's and a alternate bridge. The chorus is tweaked a bit too and the lyrics shown below are revised from Dean. I am having a hard time with keeping it clear from an 80's sounding track, was nor intentional. Hope this version is closer to current. Also I left in the pre-chorus like before. I have read some newer comments and it looks like there is an agreement on the pre-chorus needing to change. I will look into that more.Mainly interrested in comments on new Intro, instruments and alternate bridge.Music - Cherry Moon Rev4:http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... am=1Lyrics - Cherry Moon:VERSEMy first kiss was a rose-haired girlHer scarlet eyes lit up my worldWith reflections, siren-likeOf a red moon on a deep red nightRuby sky, I gotta preachThat on these nights everything’s in reachI see clear. Thoughts alignMiracles come. It’s a magic timePRECHORUS Underneath a cherry moon shineCHORUS Cherry moon, cherry moonHeart beats wild under cherry moonCherry moon, magic moonDreams come true. I love cherry moonVERSE With the seagulls, I drank wineWhile the porpoise sang Patsy ClineAll the fish danced from the seaOn a white beach turning burgundyThen I saw you in that crimson lightStaring up at the glow so rightJust like a big neon signThat red orb told me you were mine PRECHORUSI love you enchanted moon shineCHORUSBRIDGE Big old eclipse, Earth, moon, sunMoon turns red. Hope and fate become oneCHORUS CHORUS [optional]© 2008 by Matthew Stevens & Dean Brantley TaylorComment further if you like.Thanks,Matt

[deantaylor]

Which chorus lyric do you like best? Which will taxi screener's like best? Which sounds best in our latest draft: http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... tream=1THE ORIGINALCherry moon, cherry moonHeart beats wild under cherry moonCherry moon, cherry moonDreams come true under cherry moonOR THE NEW ONECherry moon, cherry moonHeart beats wild under cherry moonCherry moon, magic moonDreams come true. I love cherry moonThanks, Dean

[keystevens]

Hi all,The following is a link to the latest music file for review.I revised the end of the chorus. The lyrics are revised and the outro of the song.http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... m=trueThis is a rough demo vocal only, we will be posting for a singer for this song reel soon.Thanks,Matt