Country Song Lyrics

[unsygnedhype]

Any feedback you have would be great...jus a little something we been working on"Your Love"Verse 1:As the rising sun, fills the morning skiesI wanna be there with you by mysideOh and in your eyes, I don't want to hide Im gonna be here for you, rest assure everyday and nightthen a coupla years go past and I still catch your glanceoh how I don't wanna miss this chance/romance Chorus:look at us now, loving babyhow can we miss out, its oh so crazyin a time when its all so blindim praying you'll still be minecause a love like yours is so hard to find Verse 2:I keep looking for more, you loves what I needand/theres just a few short steps that lie betweenthe way we are, like a shining starif I reached too touch tell me would it be too much/farand would you walk away?baby I want you to stay to awake everyday and see your smiling face Chorus: Bridge:Well I know everytime that Im not with you Im not ableto show you the love of which that I am capablelike the force inside how I jus wanna make it stableopen my heart to you and lay it all on the tableno messing around no this ain't a fablelet me knowMack

[matthoggard]

Ok!Now your on to something. I like the imagery. The lyrics flow well. The shining star line is a great image. Refine it. Things like that are what stick in the mind.Good stuff!M~

[ontariolightning]

Hey, how are you?I couldn't get past the first line because I got thinking about the word "skies"IMO there can only be one sky, but thats just me and it got me thinking LOLNow I'm debating this in my mind but moving onto your next lineI wanna be there with you by myside - do you mean by your side?I also don't understand this line - Oh and in your eyes, I don't want to hide Rhyming glance and chance is iffy with me but it still worksI don't understand what verse two means..I think you should make it cleareryour bridge uses the same rhyme too much and it's far too long for a bridgedepends what you want to do with this - commercial or just for yourself?Your chorus is a different song than your versesIs he with her or are they apart or did she die...Not very sure what's going on I think you need to focus more on the ideaI'll be looking for the rewrite if you choose to do soGood news is you know all about structure, so that's good!Take care!

[unsygnedhype]

Thanks for the feedback...helped me a lot...new revised version should follow the same idea with a clearer prespectiveVerse 1:As the rising sun, fills the morning skyI wish to hold you close i dont wanna hideOh and in your eyes, i see the treasure inside Im gonna be here for you, rest assure everyday and nightthen when a coupla years go past baby can I still have this dance?Oh I don't wanna miss this chance Chorus:Listen to me now, i love you babyhow can we miss out, its oh so crazyin a time when its all so blindim praying you'll still be minecause a love like yours is so hard to find Verse 2:I kept looking for more,and your loves what I needNow theres just a few short steps that lie betweenand the way you are, like a shining starif I reached too touch tell me would it be too muchand would you walk away?baby I want you to stay lets awake everyday in each others arms Chorus: Bridge:Well I know that most times im not with you im not ableBut Im askin for a second chance show you that i’m capableI wanna open my heart to you and lay it all on the tablelet me knowMack

[ontariolightning]

Hey Mack It Is improved and I understand nowYou want her to take a chance to be with youThe bridge tells us you two were lovers oncenow all you want is a second chanceI think there might be too many wordsThe simpler it is the more profound they can beBut it is better than your first writeMy suggestion would be to simplify your versesTake care!