Feedback Request: Modern Jazz Hip Hop Instro

[mteezykeys]

Hey working on some stuff for a current TAXI listing. Am I on target here?

My Track

Taxi Listing
Reference Tracks

[BBvideo]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CN39xsDJ-1M[/BBvideo]
[BBvideo]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WFBawDbqp20[/BBvideo]
[BBvideo]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PSzLBmC8B6A[/BBvideo]

Description
Please submit modern Instrumentals (and/or Cues) that seamlessly combine Hip-Hop beats and productions with Jazz stylings and instrumentation! Your submissions should have slick productions, engaging grooves, memorable melodic motifs, and well-crafted arrangements, layering instrumentation in and out as they progress to create a sense of forward momentum and dynamics. Please be sure that all virtual instruments or samples you use are high-quality and not dated-sounding.

[eandersonmusic]

Hey Michael!
I'm diggin this track, I think it's pretty on point with the brief.
But I do feel that the kick and snare Sounds need to be changed.
For me the kick doesn't hit hard enough, and I don't feel like a sidestick snare is the right choice, or maybe try layering it with some different snare sounds.
Also you may want to experiment and try some lofi filters, eqs and such to give it that feel the references have.
Hope this helps.
Erik

[davidagates]

This is a lovely bit of work, I was about to write "maybe pop in a stripped down section", but then boom. There it was.

The snare and kick definitely need more oomph. Given the genre cross over those are the biggest elements from hip-hop. Get a snare with more snap, may pop a bit of verb on there and I think you'd be golden.

I might recommend maybe adding another melodic element, purely on the basis that I've submitted similar in the past and I've been getting "is a bit repetitive" as feedback, which, lets be honest, most of those kinds of tracks are anyway. But ho hum!