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[GlenBac]

Greeting good people of Taxi.com

I would like some feedback on an acoustic instrumental I am considering for submission. Please offer your constructive criticisms and I appreciate the time.

http://www.reverbnation.com/tunepak/2737977

Thank you

[deantaylor]

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I like the composition. It has a nice feel.

[bwd]

Hi Glen. Nice tune! Reminds me of the Shadows. All you need is a whammy bar! I think some of the drum fills are over-complicated (e.g. 0.50) for the relaxed vibe of the guitars. The timing on the strummed acoustic could be tighter in a couple of places. This would work for a Muzak-type listing. Cheers, Doug

[GlenBac]

THANKS for the feedback! I agree with the muzak type thing...as I was listening to it while producing it, I thought this would be cool to listen to in an elevator...LOL.
Thanks again for commenting.

[jefflaplante]

A few suggestions to improve this song:

1. This was mentioned before, but simplify the drum fills. They do not fit with the relaxed mood of the song.

2. Re-record the bass. It could be more "in the pocket". As is, it distracts from the ryhthm of the piece rather than provide a foundation.

3. The string sound is synthetic sounding (and possibly tuned a bit flat). Invest in a good sample library such as East/West.

4. Maybe add some reverb to the lead melody and possibly EQ the lead until you get the tone that you are looking for.

Lots of potential here...especially for a MUZAK type listing. Good Luck!

[GlenBac]

Thank you...will work with those suggestions...
Much appreciated!

[thokus]

wow, real nice tune ... A few tweeks and I think you got a hit ... Already mentioned.. the strings need some work but the idea is great... The drums I think might do better with a brush beat , make them a little softer .. Real nice tune though good job..
Tom

[jnmorrison]

Hey Glen!
Welcome to the forums! ; )
Make sure to introduce yourself over in the "General Hangout" section!
Good to have you aboard!

Rock on, and talk to you more soon!
NIck

[GlenBac]

Hey Nick THANKS!!!

Thanks everyone for the great feedback. I will take everything into consideration while re-working the song...
Cheers!

[GlenBac]

Greetings, great minds of Taxi forum.

Here's the re-worked version of the song "Hear me out"

http://www.reverbnation.com/tunepak/2765583

-I've re-worked the drums to eliminate most of the fills.
- Re-worked the bass line to not be so active
-The strings are east-west and have been re-worked
- The lead part has been tweaked with eq and reverb added to help it stand out

Please offer your thoughts..
Thanks
Glen