Why do you think 30 seconds intro works for Aguilera? Is it because she moans during intro (well, it's a voice, too!) or "Beautiful" is meant for radio so it's OK to have longer intro? Yes, Beautiful is much better produced, and I believe that a part of what you say you'd change structurally wouldn't be an issue if my song was better produced, I think. After all, the form was literally copied from "Beautiful" (but the production unfortunately was not)nick.moxsom wrote: Structure-wise, you absolutely HAVE to cut the intro in half – like, that's the very first thing you do. Picture yourself as the A&R guy who's heard 200 songs today and is running out of time to find THE song. Would you wait 30 seconds to hear a voice come in? I wouldn't. I'd have clicked 'next' before then. There's also that dead section at 1:24. I'd make the chord changes twice as fast and cut the in half too, for demo purposes.
Nick, thank you for really picturesquely and useful critique. I am already working on modifications. And I thank you for the good wishes.
Yes, we are fortunate to have this beautiful nature in Croatia.nick.moxsom wrote:BTW, I LOVE Croatia. I've never been to Zagreb, but have spent many summer vacations in Trogir
I have never visited your part of the universe. Thank you once again. I will upload new improved version ASAP.