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Indie pop ballad - artist pitch

Post by IngridElkner » Wed Jan 20, 2016 7:41 pm

Hi all,

This is my track, 'Baddest Luck', that I submit for indie listings, especially when the a las include artists like Lana del Rey.

https://soundcloud.com/ingridelkner/baddest-luck

It's for artist/producer pitches, not film & tv.
I would love your feedback on any of the elements.
Thanks!

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Re: Indie pop ballad - artist pitch

Post by lesmac » Wed Jan 20, 2016 8:01 pm

Hi, it sounds very much like LDR theme/lyric /vocal wise.

Structure wise I think it was ABABCB or pretty close? Thats what they want for these pitches. {That's what they told me in a couple of rejections I've had as well as what the "Old hands" on this forum will tell you].

Mix wise I noticed that the vocal is easier to understand listening in mono so I'd suggest doing something about that. These pitches are usually vocal up.

Cool, well done :)

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Re: Indie pop ballad - artist pitch

Post by johnlewitt » Thu Jan 21, 2016 5:37 am

Ingrid,

I think it's pretty spot on.

My only nitpick would be that the drums are mixed very politely. I guess for a demo, that's okay. But I would've made them a little bit more dirty.

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Re: Indie pop ballad - artist pitch

Post by lesmac » Thu Jan 21, 2016 9:09 pm

On the whole the vocal level isn't too bad. There were a couple of spots where I had difficulty.


In the bridge I couldn't understand the BV. and part of the main vocal.

From what I have read for song pitches to artists etc. A and R people don't like looking at lyric sheets.

If you want it to be as good as it can be play it to someone who hasn't heard it before and ask them if they can understand every word.


I just found it interesting that the vocal jumped forward when listening in mono. Not that thats a bad thing, but the reverb which is integral to the sound or some stereo effect pulled the vocal back a bit.

Bestest luck for Baddest Luck :lol: :)

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Re: Indie pop ballad - artist pitch

Post by IngridElkner » Sat Jan 23, 2016 9:37 pm

Thanks guys! I'll have a chat with my friend who mixed, I agree that the backing vocal disappears into the mist in the bridge.

The feedback in the screener rejection said:
The song is on the right track stylistically, however I thought that it could be strengthened with a more unique, innovative approach to the concept and verse/bridge imagery.

Funny, I thought I word-played the shit out of the track! A few of the things were very female elements: noughts & crosses, paper hugs & kisses, chain letters... The screener may not have been familiar with these as elements of a young teenage girl's friendships.
Anyone feel the lyrics need work?

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