INTROSPECTIVE, MOODY, ACOUSTIC-BASED - Feedback please

[divinorivera]

Planning to submit to this listing and working on this song and looking into adding light electric guitar and some organ. It is in my taxi page http://taxi.com/divinorivera and please check on 'Touch'

Need some thoughts and feedback.

INTROSPECTIVE, MOODY, ACOUSTIC-BASED SINGER/SONGWRITER SONGS with Male OR Female Vocals are needed by the Creative Director of a relentlessly hard-working and very busy Music Publishing Company for placement in a specific Hit TV Show that she’s got a strong relationship with. She’s looking hard to find heartfelt, Down-to-Mid-Tempo Songs that you’d hear on the same rainy day playlist as artists like; Damien Rice, Daughter, Ben Howard, etc., etc., etc. Please listen to the following songs to get yourself in the stylistic ballpark: “The Blower’s Daughter” by Damien Rice “Smother” by Daughter “Promise” by Ben Howard Quoting the source: “This show can be dark and somber at times, so the songs you send us need to reflect that. Lyrics are fairly wide open, as long as they aren’t upbeat and positive. I know that sounds depressing, but there are multiple scenes in the show where this is needed, some tied into relationship scenarios and some for characters thinking about past events.” Give them reflective, sentimental, and intimate songs with an honest vocal performance, catchy hooks, and compelling lyrics. Your instrumental performance should be light and sparse to allow the vocals, lyrics, and melody to take the moody reigns. It’s really important that your song has universal lyrics. Please avoid references to specific names, dates, times, brands, and profanity. Please do NOT copy or rip off the referenced artists in any way, shape, or form. Use them as a general guide for tempo, tone, and overall vibe. Broadcast Quality is needed (great sounding home recordings are fine). The estimated sync fee is $500-$5,000 depending on the ultimate placement. You'll split all sync fees 50/50 with this company. This is an EXCLUSIVE, two-year, 50/50 deal. You’ll keep 100% of your Writer’s share, and the Publisher will get 100% of the Publisher’s share. Since this company offers an EXCLUSIVE deal, please be sure your material is NOT already signed to any other Libraries or Catalogs. You must own or control 100% of your Master and Copyright. Do not copy or rip off the referenced artists or songs in any way, shape, or form. Use them only as a general guide for tempo, texture, and tone. Do not submit any material with unauthorized samples of other artists’ songs, sounds, or any other form of media. Broadcast Quality is needed (great sounding home recordings are fine). All Songs will be screened on a Yes/No basis by a person hand-picked by the Publisher. No full critiques. Please submit one to three Songs online or per CD no later than Thursday, October 2nd, 2014, at 4pm (PST). TAXI #U141002SS

Touch

Why am I this way
I'm again in this state
So scared and so down
I find it hard to believe
And all that's in my mind are the things I've mistakenly done

What's this heavy weight
And this bitter taste
Pulling down my heart
But I cannot ignore that it's bringing me
To seek and search only to find

Chorus:
It's your touch that I desperately need
And I can't deny that it runs deep
All this time in the world I never knew it's all in you
Everything is in you
All I need is in you
Only you can make me feel alright
Only you can make me alright

Why are you that way?
I am this insane
You still remain reaching for my hands and my heart
Where I am lost inside this void looking for a place
To run and to hide
My ever-flowing tears falling like raindrops
May they wash the pain
And let your healing love lead me fully back
To where I belong right in your arms


Copyright 2007 Divino Rivera

[johnlewitt]

Divino,

I'm terrible at determining if these types of tunes are on target. It's a very nice performance, though it may lack a the moody quality they are asking for? Others can agrees or disagree.

One thing to note, it almost sounds like this is a live recording. I can't pinpoint the sonic reason, but it's something in the balance between the voice and guitar. I'd try and make it a little more intimate if possible.

John

[divinorivera]

John,
Thanks for the feedback and I agree with you. Added electric guitar and currently working on re-mixing to have a more intimate sound, like that of the texture of "Blower's Daughter". Thanks to Andy for some great suggestions, too. I get by with a big help from my friends!

All,
Any feedback will be appreciated.