Is this Jazzy Song too Old-School?

[karafinman]

Should I submit this? I can't keep throwing away $5 so I'm being very picky these days.

https://soundcloud.com/user-913241419/y ... al_sharing

MODERN R&B-Flavored JAZZ SONGS with Male or Female Vocals are needed by a very successful EXCLUSIVE Music Licensing Company. This company has a very long history of lots and lots of really AWESOME placements, tons of which have been for TAXI members!

This Company is searching for Songs in All Tempos in the general ballpark of the following references we got directly from them:

"Colors In The Dark" by R+R=NOW, Robert Glasper, Terrace Martin, Christian Scott aTunde Adjuah, Derrick Hodge, Taylor McFerrin, & Justin Tyson

"Think of You" by Terrace Martin, Kamasi Washington, & Rose Gold

"Change of Tone" by R+R=NOW, Robert Glasper, Terrace Martin, Christian Scott aTunde Adjuah, Derrick Hodge, Taylor McFerrin, & Justin Tyson

Please submit contemporary Jazz Songs that seamlessly infuse R&B and Hip-Hop elements with Jazz. Your submissions should have engaging rhythms, interesting melodies, and excellent musicianship. Instrumentation in the general style of the references (and others like them) will suit your submissions best. Your production and any virtual instruments or samples you use should be top-notch and fresh. Expressive, well-performed vocals could be the final touch for nailing this request!

[johndalenow]

Should I submit this? I can't keep throwing away $5 so I'm being very picky these days.

https://soundcloud.com/user-913241419/y ... al_sharing

MODERN R&B-Flavored JAZZ SONGS with Male or Female Vocals are needed by a very successful EXCLUSIVE Music Licensing Company. This company has a very long history of lots and lots of really AWESOME placements, tons of which have been for TAXI members!

This Company is searching for Songs in All Tempos in the general ballpark of the following references we got directly from them:

"Colors In The Dark" by R+R=NOW, Robert Glasper, Terrace Martin, Christian Scott aTunde Adjuah, Derrick Hodge, Taylor McFerrin, & Justin Tyson

"Think of You" by Terrace Martin, Kamasi Washington, & Rose Gold

"Change of Tone" by R+R=NOW, Robert Glasper, Terrace Martin, Christian Scott aTunde Adjuah, Derrick Hodge, Taylor McFerrin, & Justin Tyson

Please submit contemporary Jazz Songs that seamlessly infuse R&B and Hip-Hop elements with Jazz. Your submissions should have engaging rhythms, interesting melodies, and excellent musicianship. Instrumentation in the general style of the references (and others like them) will suit your submissions best. Your production and any virtual instruments or samples you use should be top-notch and fresh. Expressive, well-performed vocals could be the final touch for nailing this request!

I would definitely leave out all the high brass licks. They're way too midi sounding. The vocal is Al Jarreau all over again. ("We're In This Love Together") That's not necessarily meant to be bad, just dated, plus where's the hip-hop element they requested. Plus the title, "You Make Love So Good," doesn't really say very much worth putting to music. EG Is there any such thing as "Bad Love?" Opinions are like "belly buttons." We all have one, but that said, you're too talented to waste the $5 bucks on a misplacement.

With respect to you and your talent,

Best! John

[Paulie]

Save your money... your track is quite dated sounding. The 80s brass patches and the Yamaha DX7 tines key patch takes me straight back to 1987 or so. The reference tracks are all clean and crisp, two of them have a modern yet still classic sounding Rhodes patch of some kind. I think this track could be usable if you kept the vocal and redid all of the instrument parts with more current sounding patches.

Did you try any A/B mix comparisons? Listen to your track, then listen to one of the reference tracks. Compare the audio quality, the bass in the mix, the sounds of the snare and kick, instrument panning, etc. Then try to emulate that in your own track if you can.

Keep working!