Looking to pitch to a listing, need advice

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So, there's a listing I want to pitch this song to, by far this is NOT the completed project. I'd like to get some feedback about the lyrics, prosody, etc... if someone wants to collaborate... etc...Listen here:http://www.rebekahanncurtis.com/page7.htmlbe sure to click on the picture, and then wait a minute for it to load Lyrics for song:Hold me once again, in this dark and lonely placeIt's forever since you've been here, and felt your warm embraceTwilight lingers so, since you took my lightIn the shadows that I know, there's no end to my nightI want you to hold me, in your arms againHold onto the silence, don't let this feeling endI want you to hold me, in your arms againThe sweetest sound I know, is when you just begin toHold me once again, let me feel your breathwrap your soul around me, I'll drown in your caressswallow my surrender, let me savour your kissto remain with you is heaven come cure my aching wishI want you to hold me, in your arms againHold onto the silence, don't let this feeling endI want you to hold me, in your arms againThe sweetest sound I know, is when you just begin toHold me(instrumental)swallow my surrender, let me savour your kissto remain with you is heaven come cure my aching wishI want you to hold me, in your arms againHold onto the silence, don't let this feeling endI want you to hold me, in your arms againThe sweetest sound I know, is when you just begin toHold me Copyright Rebekah Ann Curtis 2009