My Back Pages - Critiques welcomed

[gburgess]

I’ve been working on a cover song for a classic cover listing. I selected “My Back Pages” by Bob Dylan. Please feel free to point out everything and anything you believe would improve the song. All feedback is welcome. Thank you for your time!http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... tream=true

[cameron]

Hey GB,I hate to be the bearer of bad tidings, but the production isn't going to get past the screeners. Guys like Bill Gaunce, Vince, Derek, etc. have set the bar so high that I don't think you'll stand a chance. Hell, why do you think I have all my demos done in a studio? It's not because I have extra money to spend, that's for sure. They keyboards in particular are going to need lots of work to measure up to current standards.Cool choice of songs though. It's great to hear songs like this once in awhile to be reminded what a great songwriter Dylan is.Cam

[gburgess]

Cam,Thanks for sharing. You are 100% correct--they set the bar high. The only way to draw closer to that high bar is to be willing to take some honest criticism from the forum. Thanks again.GB

[cameron]

Right you are GB, and it's to your credit that you're doing that.Cam

[deantaylor]

Hey GB,Agree with Cam on the production. Also, I had a hard time understanding the words (or maybe since it is Dylan .. that's what you are going for ... lol).Dean

[feaker]

GIf you could change that single strum it would make the song flow so much better. ( or at least vary it)Nothing wrong with your voice. Sounds like you are a little timid. Stand back a little and belt it out and yes a little louder.Almost could come up a few notes. Your low notes are a struggle.I would keep at it bud.paul

[orest]

I like your version but I wanted to hear some more variations, couldn't play the song the the end though, but 2 minutes or so. They drum beat needs some more work, it doesn't sit in the production with the rest of the instruments.

[381]

G, good song choice. All the points referenced above are valid but I would not toss this out. What I would try is (and this is hard for me to type as I'm a guitar player) pull the guitar out and run the arrangement on the keys and loop. Build on that, Re-mix and see what you think. Good luck

[gburgess]

In my year and a half with TAXI, I believe this is only my third or fourth attempt at a vocal as I have been trying to learn the ropes of the music side of DAWs recording. Even though one of my vocals received a publisher’s (a publisher did the reviews) forward, I realize that one small isolated bit of success is a far cry from mastering, or even proving adequacy of the craft.As I say to friends and family, I’ve learned a lot in a short time, but still have a long way to go.Thanks Cam, Dean, Paul, Orest, 381. Some solid food for thought. Exactly what I requested. I greatly appreciate each of you taking time to listen and share.GB

[k o star]

hi GB...As I'm listening, I'm tryna separate the parts that work & the parts that don't... ok... so far, I think the vocals are pretty ok... the overall structure's good too...What needs work on are sounds: the drumparts... especially that midi sounding hi-hat, it's a little too upfront which makes it sound very mechanical, which could be good for electronica but not this genre... so lower the vol. on that & also, if U could, bring up the bass-iness of the song... for instance the bass parts & the kik... and also the snares.Another thing is the guitar... if U could somehow try to make it sound more natural with more variations to the strum... maybe for some parts strum up instead of all down... these are MHO... and I hope that they're useful.I think the basic structure is good & it's almost there... just need a little enhancement on the production side of things, if U know what I mean..-Kel