need some feedback

[terryb]

Hi everyone...need a little feedback on a tune I've been working on...It's called Purple Sky...thanks...http://www.taximusic.com/hosting/home.p ... yblackwell

[jazzstan]

Overall a tasty feel, but the three melodic parts at the beginning (2 piano, 1 guitar, right?) were kinda stepping in eachother, so my ear could sort out what was the lead actor and what was supporting cast. The chorus was Ok on this aspect, and left some "air time" for the ear to process what it heared. Suggestion: Build UP to the trioka, over the duration of the tune, and use three different voices (perhaps a woodwind on the high piano part?) and leave some phrasing space for each of the alternate voices to be heard, kind of like a "round."