" Neverland"

jjktunes · Post by **jjktunes** » Fri May 08, 2009 4:37 pm

"Neverland" (BMI)Written By:Jay Buchanan/Johnny Spears/Kyle Gartonhttp://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_id=196737&stream=true(Verse 1)I walked up to the counter at the buss stationAnd the girl behind the desk could tell I wasn't on vacationI had holes in my coat and my beard was filled with dirtAnd the smell of downtown was living in my shirtI reached into my pocket gave her all that I had leftI said Ma'am I need your help to break a promise to myself(Chorus 1)I was never going backI was never going homeNever gonna face that demon I've been running from so longI was never gonna take that stepBut here I am Ma'am I need a ticket to get me backBack to neverland (Verse 2)The next Thing I had to do Was get a haircut and a shaveBuy that brand new ball and gloveAnd place it on his graveGo see Father Johnson Where the sign says Jesus savesAnd go ask the families forgivenessFor what I did that day(Pre Chorus)Just pulling in this drivewaySends a chill up my spineAnd the reason that I ran awayKeeps running through my mind(Chorus 2)I was never going backI was never going homeNever gonna face that demon I've been running from so longI was never gonna take that stepBut here I am Man I can't believe that I came backBack to neverland(Bridge)It was a sunny saturdayI was driving past the parkWhen a kid chased his baseball Out in front of my carNow he's never coming backHe's never coming homeNever gonna fall in loveOr raise a family of his ownHis momma's never gonna hold him againForgive me if you canIf I could I'd take his placeIn neverlandIn neverland (Tag)I walked up to the counter At the buss station

squids · Post by **squids** » Fri May 08, 2009 4:52 pm

Well, that's one sad song but I liked how you set it up. I liked the verse to chorus lead in, gonna make it easy ta produce and sing.......was hopin you weren't goin where I thought but yep, I guess the hook is the title so there ya go. And a very good one it is.Is this a country tune, perchance?

jjktunes · Post by **jjktunes** » Fri May 08, 2009 4:55 pm

Thank you. Yeah Its a tear jerker, and yes it is country. I kinda doubt we will ever get a forward on this one unless this is just the thing they need, a big cry your eyes out tune.

lyricboy · Post by **lyricboy** » Mon May 11, 2009 12:22 pm

Yeah.Ouch.

lyricboy · Post by **lyricboy** » Mon May 11, 2009 12:24 pm

I mean, it's great storytelling and lyrically and structurally, but tearjerker is right.Didn't want to sound critical.

jjktunes · Post by **jjktunes** » Mon May 11, 2009 2:40 pm

Not that mine compares, but "He stopped Loving Her Today", "Thats The Good Stuff", "God's Will" - Martina McBride, "Wish You Were Here" - Mark Wills."Just a Dream" - Carrie Underwood. "Whiskey Lullaby" - Brad Paisley (with Alison Krauss). Just to name a few. Are you saying sad songs don't work well for Taxi ?

jjktunes · Post by **jjktunes** » Mon May 11, 2009 2:48 pm

I posted the link to the song if anybody wants to listen, grab a tisssue http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... tream=true

wordwoman · Post by **wordwoman** » Tue May 12, 2009 1:44 am

Well, I really want to hear this but I'm not able to because I haven't fully joined yet and can't figure out how to do so....but I'm working on it.I am a country lyricist, new to Taxi, but not at all new to writing. THIS is a very powerful lyric to be sure, and I really wish that I could hear it.And...I am curious to hear how that longer bridge works. I'm sure it does with the singing.Very nice flow to the song. I think alot could relate this in a way...to their own lives and circumstances. Extremely emotionally driven....it got to ME and it would get to others as well. Very nice writing. Good team you've put together for this one. In co-writing, the chemistry really has to be there to make it work. I've been blessed to have found that on a number of occasions. I'm glad that you did as well.Jan

deantaylor · Post by **deantaylor** » Tue May 12, 2009 3:24 am

Good lyric. I like it. I didn't listen, but your verse 1 and verse 2 structures seem quite different.Dean

wordwoman · Post by **wordwoman** » Tue May 12, 2009 4:09 am

I listened and I've already told you that it is A-1....listening made all the difference in the world, even though I thought you had a great lyric there. Just a great sounding tune.Jan

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