No 'Meant To Be' [Writer's Home Demo]

[magicjuani]

Hello everyone,
I’m a Paris-based songwriter seeking worlwide exciting and hardworking collaborations!
I recently wrote a home demo called ‘No Meant To Be’.
It tells the story of a man and a woman who cannot confess their love to each other because they don’t want to get hurt, in their own way, but the untold leads to what they fear most: loneliness.

You can listen to it here: https://soundcloud.com/juancerrasongwriter

Feel free to comment on the lyrics and the melody of the song (however, please don’t be too critical on my vocals, it is just a rough recording made for the singer)

LYRICS:

I guess we are no ‘meant to be’
That’s what you’re not telling me
But it’s been written in your eyes
That we haven’t the closest ties
I’ve been tryin’ to follow you
Tryin’ to get a rendez-vous
Touchin’ your hand, sayin’ it’s true

But we were no ‘meant to be’
The secret you kept away from me
The words you wanted me to read
But I was too blind to see

What’s going on in your mind?
Why the answer’s so hard to find?
Is it about how old we are?
About the age of our lucky stars?
But how can I enjoy myself?
How can I express myself?
When I can’t reach out to you

But we were no ‘meant to be’
The secret you kept away from me
The words you wanted me to read
But I was too blind to see

I know at some point you loved me
You were too afraid to say it
A soothing smile on your face
Silky hair, mellow voice
You’re everything I need but I’ve lost all my senses
And now I’m so sick at heart, I’m running the fever of your love
Because we were ‘no meant to be’, that’s what you kept hiding me

But we were no ‘meant to be’
The secret you kept away from me
The words you wanted me to read
But I was too blind to see

No ‘meant to be’
No ‘meant to be’

© 2014 Juan Cerra - Magic Juani Publishing for Magic Juani Productions
Thank you

[TerrellBurt]

I’ve been tryin’ to follow you
Tryin’ to get a rendez-vous
Touchin’ your hand, sayin’ it’s true

Are the above lyrics supposed to be the bridge? It sounds like it but forgive me if I'm wrong. I'm not a producer but possibly try adding a different sound or two to this part so show some contrast in the music between the verses and hooks.

[magicjuani]

I’ve been tryin’ to follow you
Tryin’ to get a rendez-vous
Touchin’ your hand, sayin’ it’s true

Are the above lyrics supposed to be the bridge? It sounds like it but forgive me if I'm wrong. I'm not a producer but possibly try adding a different sound or two to this part so show some contrast in the music between the verses and hooks.

No, they aren't part of the bridge, they're just the end of the first verse but it would be a nice move to add some sounds to highlight the contrast just before the chorus !
Thanks for the suggestion !

[magicjuani]

Ok guys,

What do you think it's best to do with this song now (find a singer to demo it, rewrite some parts of the lyrics?...)

Thank you for your kind suggestions and ideas!

[magicjuani]

New version with new lyrics reviewed from this thread http://forums.taxi.com/topic130350.html

Not Meant To Be
https://soundcloud.com/juancerrasongwri ... eant-to-be

I guess we are not meant to be
That's what you're not telling me
It's been written in your eyes
That we haven't the closest ties
I've been tryin' to follow you
Tryin' to get a rendez-vous
Touchin' your hand, sayin' it's true

But I was too blind to see
The secret you kept away from me
The words you wanted me to read
We were not meant to be

What's going on in your mind?
Why's the answer so hard to find?
Is it about how old we are?
About the age of our lucky stars?
But how can I escape this hell?
How can I express myself?
I reached out for you and fell

But I was too blind to see
The secret you kept away from me
The words you wanted me to read
We were not meant to be

I know at some point you loved me
You were too afraid to say it
A soothing smile on your face
Silky hair, mellow voice
A part written for you, you didn't want to play it
And now I'm so sick at heart, I'm running the fever of your love

But I was too blind to see
The secret you kept away from me
The words you wanted me to read
We were not meant to be

Not meant to be
Not meant to be