Our Time Has Come

[Dynamic1]

Hi Everyone,

I'm planning on finally joining Taxi.
I would love your thoughts on my Ballad.
I wrote and produced it on my Computer with Yamaha Keyboard and hired a Demo Vocalist.

Do you think i could send this for Pop listings in Taxi?
I was thinking of maybe producing a country version.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=9390694

Thanks a lot.

Leo.

[ottlukk]

Leo:
That was damned impressive. That's the best first song I've heard by a new poster. Really, really fine.
Ott

[bwd]

Hi Leo. Great arranging! The song reminds me of those big ballads from the 60s. The vocal has that big reverb sound of that era. I like the chord change at 1.00. After the hook at 1.14 I'd suggest a lift to a short chorus that uses the phrase "Our time has come" again. I think a counrty version would work. Cheers,Doug

[Dynamic1]

Thanks a lot Ottlukk and Bwd, its great to get encouraging comments like that.
I've been listening to your tracks, very impressive.
I look forward to chatting more with you guys.

Leo.
Greetings from Dublin Ireland.

[slowdance]

Leo,

Has a real ABBA feel to it.....liked the musical arrangement.....

Regards,
Dick

[Casey H]

Hi Leo
You have a nice start here. There are some good melody lines. This song is not at the point yet where it would get forwarded for a pop listing. However, Taxi could give you lots of feedback to make the song and production better.

I didn't see lyrics on your page but one thing that jumps out at me is that you have way too many cliches. You need to re-write it so that you say things in more creative & less "heard that a million times before" ways. That goes for both the actual words and choice of rhymes.

I think the singer is pitchy in places.

The style is very retro but that can be OK as long as you know what style you are targeting and how you will pitch it. For film/TV (with the right production) if you can pinpoint who it sounds like and/or what era that's a plus.

Production-wise you did a good job with the tools you have. However, it would need a better production, more natural instrument sounding, to pitch it.

Don't feel beat up. There is a lot of good here. Part of the process is write, re-write, record, re-record, etc. Taxi reviews can be helpful. So keep at it!

Best,
Casey

[bfl]

I'm impressed, doing that with a keyboard. Singer sounds pretty good to me!

lyrics did seem just kind of there but they could work depending on what it's used for

does sound very retro - like when people first started using big synths because it was a new thing

maybe you can find a home for it - not sure about the current listings they put out, though

country lyrics have a (deceptively) very high bar, and nothing in this stood out that way to me based on what I could hear

Anyway - send it to some of the pop listings that provide feedback and see what happens - you'll learn something no matter what

very impressive though! good luck and look forward to hearing more of your music

[Dynamic1]

Thanks a lot guys for your feedback, i really appreciate it.
I do admit that i find it easier to write music first, then the lyrics.
I come from an Electronic music backround, but just over a year ago i got more interested in Contempory Songwriting.
So i will take on board all your advice.

Thanks again and look forward to chatting and learning more!

Leo.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default ... tent=music

[GlenBac]

My thoughts...Great arrangement! Love the intro. Definitely has the big ballad of the 60's era going on. If that's what your targeting then you're on track. I agree with the lyrics being a little cliche, but keep working them you have a pretty strong melody.

I would lower the reverb somewhat on the vocals and EQ them a bit better to sit in more with the mix. At times the music and vocals sounded like they were fighting for the spotlight.

Sounds good, chord progression is strong. Just need a few tweeks here and there. These are all just my opinion of course...Good luck and keep writing and producing.