Playing For Tips And Beer

[willied]

Wrote this one based on a recent experience. Got some more work to do here. Please feel free to comment. Always appreciatedBillPlaying For Tips And Beer © 2009 V1 I'm standing up here in the spotlight Just picking and playing my songs Trying to get the crowd going Hoping they will sing along V2 I don't have much time to play Only filling in for the band There all out back smoking Some foreign contraband Chorus: Yes I'm playing for tips and beer As the crowd begins to cheer Just one man playing his songs Move over Hank here I come V3 I hope this ain’t the last time I stand up on this stage A man playing his music Singing his own songs today V4 Got advice from a producer Told me I'm doing it all wrong If I want to make money I need to play cover songs Chorus: Yes I'm playing for tips and beer As the crowd begins to cheer Just one man playing his songs Move over Hank here I come V5 The bands back from the smoke brake Acting giggly and glassy eyed It's time to be leaving And count my tips on the side V6 My tips there not overwhelming Got 10 bills and a handful of change And the beer is overflowing Hope I can still get up and play Chorus: Yes I'm playing for tips and beer As the crowd begins to cheer Just one man playing his songs Move over Hank here I come Tag: It's the end of the song Time for me to move along Yes I'm playing for tips and beer

[pitterpatter]

Hi WilliedIf it was me, I'd cut back to three or four verses. Take your best lines and shorten it. Time the whole song to be four minutes or less. Also, for your chorus, I think it would sound better if the last line rhymed with the first two lines.Yes I'm playing for tips and beerAs the crowd begins to cheerJust one man playing his songsMove over Hank I'm (finally) here.

[willied]

Pitterpatter, I agree it does need to be shortened I am going to repost the song with the changes.I'm going to try singing the chorus with the change you suggestion then decide on the line.Thank you for you suggestion, appreciatedBill

[willied]

Playing For Tips And Beer © 2009 Bill Duffy V1 I'm standing up here in the spotlight Just picking and playing my songs Trying to get the crowd going Hoping they will sing along V2 I don't have much time to play Only filling in for the band There all out back smoking Some foreign contraband Chorus: Yes I'm playing for tips and beer As the crowd begins to cheer As long as I can play hereJust one man playing his songs Move over Hank here I come V3Bands back from their smoke brake All giggly and glassy eyed It's time for me to leave But I'll be back next break time V4My tips there not overwhelming Ten bills and some change But the beer is overflowing Hope I can still get up and play Chorus: Yes I'm playing for tips and beer As the crowd begins to cheer Just one man playing his songs Move over Hank here I come BridgeGot advice from a producer Said I need to play cover songs But if he listened to the crowd He’d know that he was wrong Chorus: Yes I'm playing for tips and beer As the crowd begins to cheer Just one man playing his songs Move over Hank here I come Tag:Yes, I’m playing for tips and beer

[jwebbinspired]

Bill, I really like the protagonist in your song here. I like how he sees this "insignificant" event as an important moment in his life. And possibly the start of a great career while the band is getting stoned. I think this is very unique. What is your intent for this song? Commerical country or your own peice? That would have a lot to do with how I'd critique it.Andy

[willied]

Andy thank you for the questions.I always write for Commercial. I also play most of my songs when playing out. Any suggestions are always appreciated.Bill