FALLEN DEEPLY - please review this song thanks

[hoknes]

Appreciate a listen and any comments you can on the song http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7583017Appreciate comments mainly on commercialability, genre, recording quality, arrangement, instrumentationthanksHere is the Taxi guidelines if you have time - thanks!SONG CRITIQUE CHECKLIST Style__ On target for today's market in ________ genre__ Not current sounding__ Hard to classifyStyle Comments:_________________________________________Melody__ Good music in verses__ Verses could be stronger__ Good music in chorus__ Verses/Chorus sound too similar__ Memorable Hook__ Hook not obvious enoughMelody Comments:_________________________________________Structure__ Intro too long__ Well-written structure__ Good sectional contrast__ Not enough sectional contrast__ Could use a bridgeStructure Comments:_________________________________________Lyric__ First line makes me want to hear more__ Engaging__ Cohesive__ Good use of imagery__ Rhymes well__ Communicates emotion to listener__ Lacks focus__ Unique__ Too abstract__ I don't understand it__ Too predictable__ Too many cliches__ Awkward phrasing__ Vocal does not help to sell song__ Vocal does help to sell songLyrcial Comments:_________________________________________Title__ Good title__ So-So title__ Can't determine title by listening__ Could appear in a more strategic place__ Doesn't repeat enough__ Repeats too oftenTitle Comments:_________________________________________OVERALL COMMENTS_________________________________________Now give a rating 1 to 10, 1 being the worst, 10 being the best:__ Music__ Lyrics__ Marketability__ Arrangement__ Production__ EngineeringNOW. Would you walk this into a label credibility on this music?

[orest]

I really got the 80's vibe out of this one! Since you been gone, and the vocals reminded me a bit of the singer from GTR. I think it's well produced. Maybe a little faster in the tempo wouldn't hurt.

[deantaylor]

Hey Terry,This song has a GREAT CATCHY HOOK. I LOVE that about it. The rest of the melody is good too and the production sounds good to me. Hard to review lyrics unless you post them.I get a retro vibe .. maybe 70's/80's.Dean

[hoknes]

Thanks for the compliments - I really think this song is catchy and has a chance as a hit. Of course i want it to sound modern and NOT 1980s - luckily I am a fan of GTR so thats nice!What does the song need to be more modern for the Young Pop Teen market ?

[k o star]

hi Hoknes,I love the melodies in this track... if U want a more modern sound... add some accompanying synths in the background... HTH.Kel