"Joined at the Hip" - sketch

[ideascapes]

I've been asked to write an Adult Contemporary song for a film about a pair of women, BFF types. I convinced my wife to sing on this pre-demo, which is an accomplishment in itself!Anyway, am wondering if you see this as a good lyrical/musical approach before I continue. Note that the recording only goes through the first chorus right now and the lyric is slightly different than what you'll hear. Thanks!Vince------------------------------www.taxi.com/ideascapesSong Title: Joined at the HipCopyright 2009 Vince Constantino, ideascapes music (ASCAP)Verse 1You drink mocha latteI’m right there with youPsyched up for Pilates, yeahNow yoga’s what we doThe latest, greatest fashionsThe hottest, coolest trendsWe jump on when the in thing startsAnd hop off where it endsChorusYeah sister we’reJ-J-J-Joined at the hipYeah, we’re the stylin’ starsWe do things the same big wayInseparable we areJoined at the hip—woo hoo! Verse 2Gangsta rap and hip hopI grabbed ‘em and tossed ‘em tooWild ring tones and IM chatsiPod then YouTubeLow-rise and the high-rise We been there, done ‘em allFashion mags, martini barsRode ‘em, took the fallChorusBridgeAh, we need a hip replacement, this act is getting staleA fresh and modern statement, a new street-smart cocktailWe’re takin’ it to the streets, like Madison AvenueWho else would I hang with, if I wasn’t hanging with you?Are you with me? (Yes I’m with you)Are you with it? (Yes I’m with it) Let’s go, girl!

[k o star]

Hey Vince...Firstly... I gotta tell U which part I really really love best abt this.... the part where it goes... "J J J Joined"Love Love Love that part!!!The beginning didn't really catch my attention but when that Chorus kicked in... ... I have to say YES!!!I think it's ok the beginning was simple cos that helped to emphasize the Awesome Chorus part...Whatever the case, keep the Chorus keep the Chorus! MHO that is...Would love that U continued on this track... I wanna hear more... pleeeaaase...Regards,-Kel

[feaker]

VinceInteresting.Your lady sings pretty darn good.Got a funky beat that makes you move for sure. Good vibe.Don't know if I like where the verse words identically follows the music. I agree the chorus is best for now. Gotta love the who who:)my 2cPaul

[jwebbinspired]

Vince, Congrats on getting the Mrs. to sing your sketch, my wife wouldn't do that for a million dollars. I'm not crazy about the verse melody. I don't I like how bouncy it is. I think it might be the piano that's bothering me...I do like the chorus melody though, I think you're on the right track there. I think the lyrics are pretty good for the most part. Some of it I didn't get the point of, like "Gangsta rap and hip hop I grabbed ‘em and tossed ‘em too" but you might know more specifics about the characters than we do. You're good Vince. How quickly do you punch this stuff out?Andy

[tinozigzag]

Ciao Vincenzo,I like this song, you obviously still need to work at it but you are going on the right direction.Love the dums.ReagardsTINO

[ideascapes]

Thanks Kel, Paul, Andy, Tino--always a big help to hear your opinions. Sounds like the chorus is the strongest aspect, so I'll rethink the verse melody/harmony/rhythm.I sketched this out many months ago and it came together pretty fast, but it was just sitting on the shelf 'til I got this request, so now I gotta get serious!V>

[matthoggard]

Hey Vince,As is, I hear more of a Broadway musical type song. This style is not my expertise so I cant really comment on anything substantial. I like how the melody follows the chord progressions early on. Matt