your thoughts please (first post)

[tcaddigan]

Hello, I'm new to the forum. I plan on signing up for taxi soon, and I am trying to finish up some of my work in the mean time.I'm very interested in writing music for film and TV, I'm focusing on building a library (or catalog?) at the moment.please take a listen to this piece and comment, I'm very anxious to hear some feedback.For now, I call it 'the cell' because it started as a score to a scene in the movie 'The Cell' I was going to use for a demo reel. I'm open to suggestions on more obvious titles for use in a music library.EDIT: SONG DELETED - NEW VERSION POSTED BELOWLength is 2 minutes.I have 3 main concerns with this piece;1. structure (I'm really not sure of myself on this.)2. percussion (is the rhythm cheesy?)3. authenticity of the strings (time for a new string library?)Please note that the mix is far from finished, this was a quick mix.be brutal!

[ideascapes]

t,If you scored this to an actual scene it'll be hard to comment on the structure as we'd need to see the moving image. Don't know if anybody has done this, but it would have been cool for you to have posted a link to the video sync'd to the audio somehow.Percussion is a little cheesy--I'd get rid of that phasey sound; that could help. The piano sample didn't stand up as super authentic, especially in the high end. EQ or multi-band compression could help.The strings were OK, since you used them as a pad. In the beginning when they were exposed I could hear a slightly unnatural bowing sound.I can't be brutal, but I can be honest! Welcome.Vince

[ceedub]

The structure seems fine. It's a simple form - all about addition and subtraction of elements. Having said that, I think the elements, of course, need to sound great. Musical content is fine, but none of the sounds excite me. The strings and piano don't sound real. You could replace the strings with a synth sound that doesn't try to emulate strings. Percussion is key to this track and sounds fair, but not great.So, that's my few cents. Happy composing!Cheers.

[tcaddigan]

Apr 21, 2009, 2:47am, ideascapes wrote:...If you scored this to an actual scene it'll be hard to comment on the structure as we'd need to see the moving image......Percussion is a little cheesy--I'd get rid of that phasey sound; that could help. The piano sample didn't stand up as super authentic, especially in the high end. EQ or multi-band compression could help....Thanks Vince. I think I may not have been clear initially, this started out as a score to a specific scene, but that has been scrapped and I'm now trying to make it stand on its own as a library piece.I followed your suggestions, but I think I am pretty limited in my sound library (time to upgrade). I think the piano is better sounding now, and I changed the percussion up a bit.I also changed the ending which a friend of mine hated (I was sure about it myself to begin with). I know it's an easier road to take having a 'fade out' ending, but I think it works - I welcome all comments on this.So here's my edit:http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7537105

[tcaddigan]

Apr 21, 2009, 6:31am, ceedub wrote:...I think the elements, of course, need to sound great. Musical content is fine, but none of the sounds excite me. The strings and piano don't sound real....Thanks - I think for now I may shelve this track until I have more realistic sounds.Thanks for your input guys, you have confirmed my initial thoughts that the instrument sounds just aren't realistic enough. I am hoping that once I can 'upgrade' the sounds, that the percussion can take more of a back seat in the mix as well.