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She's Doing Me (With Her Clothes On) R&B

Post by suprafly » Mon Mar 16, 2009 2:43 am

Hello everyone,This is my first post. Like to get some feedback on this song (as a song pitch). This was done with an Usher type of artist pitch in mind. Thanks in advance.http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... tream=true Girl,You areDoing itTo meSo sexy Club is popping, it’s Friday night (Background Vocals Chorus)Valet parking itKnows my ride (Background Vocals Chorus)In thru the side doorVIP’s only (Background Vocals Chorus)Stepping on the floorCalling out my homies (Background Vocals Chorus)Hottie walking Stilettos pumping (Background Vocals Chorus) Low riding hip tight jeansGot my heart to thumping (Background Vocals Chorus)Girl,You are Doing it(Repeat) BCBG topFendi belt (Background Vocals Chorus)The heat from her bodyCaused my ice to meltGirl,You are Doing itTo meSo sexyWith those clothes on With those clothes on[Repeat] I’ll admit that IHad been taken (Background Vocals Chorus)By a see- thru topAnd them mountains shaken Girl,You are Doing it[Repeat]Drinks are flowingPass it down (Background Vocals Chorus)Her skin is glowingAnd that bottom round Girl,You are Doing it[Repeat]Girl,You areDoing itTo meSo sexyWith those clothes on She’s doing me (Background Vocals Chorus) With those clothes onShe’s doing it to me (Background Vocals Chorus)Girl,You are Doing itTo meSo sexyWith those clothes on And you know you’re wrong for it (Background Chorus)With those clothes onAnd I don’t want her to quit (Background Chorus)(Alternate ending choruses)

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Post by suprafly » Mon Mar 16, 2009 12:37 pm

Thanks man. This is the feedback that I'm exactly looking for!!!!

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Post by sgs4u » Tue Mar 17, 2009 1:35 pm

Cisko, sure the guy's remarks were questionable, but there are a lot of people in the world brother. Surely you didn't mean to point your anger at everyone who isn't American.

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Post by andreh » Tue Mar 17, 2009 2:01 pm

Mar 17, 2009, 4:11pm, ciskokidd wrote:I'm so sick of all you haters @Steve: I think cisko was only referring to these guys. You're not a hater, are you? André
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Post by hummingbird » Tue Mar 17, 2009 2:30 pm

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Post by sgs4u » Tue Mar 17, 2009 2:31 pm

Mar 17, 2009, 5:01pm, andreh wrote:Mar 17, 2009, 4:11pm, ciskokidd wrote:I'm so sick of all you haters @Steve: I think cisko was only referring to these guys. You're not a hater, are you? André Correctamundo. I do not hate anyone, no how anywheres.

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Post by Casey H » Tue Mar 17, 2009 2:56 pm

Hi SupraflyYou got some good feedback here from cisko. This isn't my genre but I'd say you have some good ideas but the vocal and production need to come a long way. You might want to seek out a collaborator in your genre. Try to find someone who could help on the production and performance and contribute ideas.Song pitches are the absolute hardest. I suggest you read up on this forum about pitching songs for film/TV. The odds of some type of placement are much greater. (You don't have to give up on the other dream though)...Regardless, everything about the track has to sound highly professional. I hope you get additional constructive feedback here that will help you. Best, Casey

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Post by ciskokidd » Tue Mar 17, 2009 3:52 pm

Mar 17, 2009, 4:35pm, sgs4u wrote:Cisko, sure the guy's remarks were questionable, but there are a lot of people in the world brother. Surely you didn't mean to point your anger at everyone who isn't American. Steve,You know where my heart is man. To all my non-American friends this was in no way a slight to the great music you all make.I was just peaved at the comment made by IG. I take the same tact when my countrymen rag on the French or anyone else. There are good creative people the world over and hey my two long time collaborators are a Swiss guy and a Swede! Best,Cisko

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Post by ciskokidd » Tue Mar 17, 2009 3:58 pm

Mar 17, 2009, 5:30pm, hummingbird wrote:Opera is Italian Yes, I know - I know.And my favorite composer all time is Austrian so I'm aware it's not just about America.I just don't like people who are seeking a little help and may not have their skills up to par being torn apart the way IG did in his post - and then he takes his little swipe at Americans as if we are the only ones who consume our popular music.Warmest,Cisko

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Post by sgs4u » Tue Mar 17, 2009 3:59 pm

Mar 17, 2009, 6:52pm, ciskokidd wrote:Steve,You know where my heart is man. To all my non-American friends this was in no way a slight to the great music you all make. I was just peaved at the comment made by IG. CiskoI knew exactly where your heart is man. In a perfect place! I only mentioned it 'cause I figured you didn't really want to be responding with the same kinda crap he was throwing around... Who wants to get lumped in with that kinda mean-spirited foolishness? IG, do like Casey said. Get constructive man. There's no reason to shit on a guy's music, the way you did. It's just music.

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