Would like some feedback on a track..

[joeymurillo]

Hi guys, Just finished the version 1 of Forever we finished version 2 1st..I know weird..Anyways when you have sometime let me know what you guys think..I'm going to try to now enjoy my night a little..Then its back to the studio in the morning. Wow I made that sound bad..The morning could be worse..ha Its a good thing ..haThanksJoeywww.taxi.com/joeymurillocoalmurillo1018@yahoo.com

[heinsite]

hi joey!--i like the latin/puerto influences here, i like your vocal. and i do hear jack johnson too...--"outta nowhere" etc is a nice prechorus.--your chorus is very nice, and nice build, though if you could just vocally lift it just a bit more, you've got a killer here young man!--lyrically, i'd try to sprinkle in more concrete images, a few too many clichesbut this has a very very nice vibe man, and i like it!!all the best,warrenps: try when you post to tell us more clearly where you want us to go, and post your lyrics too! though we can hear them here very clearly, (pretty good mix!) sometimes we can give suggestions (i know, i hate that too), but once in a while a little tweak/suggestion is cool...

[deantaylor]

Joey,Musically very nice work! Really good vox, good melody, good chorus. I agree with Warren on the lyric, it seems a bit 'generic', not up to par with the music, imo.It's got a real listenable vibe!Dean

[iceman]

Hi Joey,I wish I could find that happy-in-love zone that you seem to know so well. I would think the song has excellent marketing potential, especially for film and TV.I like the simple instrumentation. The tremolo guitar is real nice.It's a winner.Randy

[joeymurillo]

Just figured the music is simple keep it simple..the music should let you image what you want..the words just help also letting the listener sing the words if they want..but thanks for the feedback..It always helps..Just shooting for that standard where when on vacation at a wedding etc..that can just put some of our work on the map..JmThanks to all