The Girl at the Circle K

[deantaylor]

Cam,I like it. But I think it is missing just a little something to put it over the top. The more fun chorus might be that thing. Also, I don't think your vocal style brings out the fun that is already there, but the demo vocalist will. You've got references to jeans in 2 different verses .. might change one of them.Dean

[cameron]

Thanks Dean, I'm going ahead with a demo but I admit I'm a little nervous about it because I agree that it's still missing something. I'm working with Jimi on a way to bring it to life and make it more fun. The reference to the jeans in the first verse was this his ideal girl was a "real cowgirl in some real tight jeans" and later in the song after he's found her he's saying ok with not getting a cowgirl because she had Wrangler jeans and a cute butt, so I think it actually furthers the story and ties it together.I really appreciate the feedback!Cam